Dare to Hope 1/?
anonymous
December 13 2013, 20:39:12 UTC
Jane Shepard stared out the window of her small room. The glass designed so that she could look out but no one could look in, one more thing further separating her from the world. One hand propped above her head as she leaned on the glass, the other idly rubbed her swollen belly. She watched the city below her bustle about, everyone living their lives, none the wiser with what was in store for them. Every time they brought her in for another debrief, she just wanted to roll her eyes at the lot of them. She wasn’t sure how many different ways she could say the same damn thing since apparently they weren’t listening
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Re: Dare to Hope 1/?
anonymous
December 13 2013, 20:41:41 UTC
Jane Shepard stared out the window of her small room. The glass designed so that she could look out but no one could look in, one more thing further separating her from the world. One hand propped above her head as she leaned on the glass, the other idly rubbed her swollen belly. She watched the city below her bustle about, everyone living their lives, none the wiser with what was in store for them. Every time they brought her in for another debrief, she just wanted to roll her eyes at the lot of them. She wasn’t sure how many different ways she could say the same damn thing since apparently they weren’t listening
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Re: Dare to Hope 1/?
anonymous
December 13 2013, 21:40:09 UTC
This is so amazing!! I love stories with children and am pretty sad that the two I was following up just aren't being updated anymore. I hope you won't stop before this is complete, A!A... I really liked you're style.
Re: Dare to Hope 1/? op
anonymous
December 14 2013, 01:49:34 UTC
Hope you don't find me to be too much of an annoyance, but I think you should put comma before direct address
ex: "What is it, Lieutenant?")
There is a big different between "Let's eat, grandma." and "Let's eat grandma." after all.
But anyways, Thank you so much, A!A! I thought that prompt of mine would never get filled but then you came and make my day so much better. I just can't wait for the next update!
Re: Dare to Hope 2/?
anonymous
December 14 2013, 11:06:09 UTC
*A/N - I apologize for any mistakes that make it through. I try and catch them all, but they are slippery little bastards. Hope you enjoy the next part anyway
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Re: Dare to Hope 3/?
anonymous
December 14 2013, 11:07:30 UTC
“Well like I told the doctors here, it's not like Cerberus gave me an owner’s manual when they woke me up. So right now I’m just going for it’s a miracle kind of thing.” Jane stated with a laugh
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Re: Dare to Hope 3/?
anonymous
December 14 2013, 15:37:56 UTC
Sadly you can't edit what you post, so like I said. You just have to try and ignore the slippery little bastards that got by me this morning. Glad you are enjoying it!
Re: Dare to Hope 3/?
anonymous
December 15 2013, 10:19:45 UTC
So... Garrus has an illegitimate son with woman that is: - not officialy his mate - human - Spectre - The Commander Goddamn Shepard His father gonna be mad
Re: Dare to Hope 4/?
anonymous
December 15 2013, 11:46:04 UTC
Garrus shifted from foot to foot as he waited for his father to come down from his room. Even though he was confident when dealing with other turians, when it came time to talk to his father he always felt like a wayward nine year old again. He had only gotten a little bit of sleep after the early morning call he had received, but that didn’t stop him from being the first up for the first time in a long time. Stretching and yawning, his sister was the next to stumble down the stairs. She stopped abruptly when she noticed her brother already dressed and waiting nervously in the main living area
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Re: Dare to Hope 5/?
anonymous
December 15 2013, 11:48:07 UTC
“Actually that only happened more recently. I always admired her, but never thought she would be more than a friend. I filled in the paperwork so that if anything happens to her, Valerius will be sent to me. But if anything happens to me, I wanted you both to know. She only has a mother alive still and she serves in the fleet, when the Reapers hit...well, the fleet will be hit hard. I love Jane, if we find each other again, well, I will be asking her to be my mate
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I hope you won't stop before this is complete, A!A... I really liked you're style.
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ex: "What is it, Lieutenant?")
There is a big different between "Let's eat, grandma." and "Let's eat grandma." after all.
But anyways, Thank you so much, A!A! I thought that prompt of mine would never get filled but then you came and make my day so much better. I just can't wait for the next update!
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PS: Don't want to be a nagging anon but in "No, nothing like that son.", you should put , before 'son'.
Also, in part 1, the part "more lonely then she had been in a very long time.", the word 'then' should be 'than' for comparison.
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- not officialy his mate
- human
- Spectre
- The Commander Goddamn Shepard
His father gonna be mad
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