Dive now. 1/?
anonymous
September 13 2015, 17:38:28 UTC
Contrary to popular belief, Shepard had a very active and curious mind. She always comes across as brash, impulsive, peremptory, and generally relying on her gut. Not that those impressions were inaccurate, but few people realize that they only are some of the many facets her personnality possesses. Whether it is due to her position as a commanding officer or the fact that she generally keeps people at arm's length, she never really knew. Probably a bit of both
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Dive now. 2/?
anonymous
September 13 2015, 17:42:02 UTC
She sends a quick message to Garrus to let him know his bottle of horosk is still in her cabin if he needs any. He probably does after spending the whole afternoon in the holding area of the docks. Dealing with the neverending influx of refugees when your own family is missing tends to do that to you. There's a special brand of despair tainting the air down there, and you can only breathe so much of it before feeling parts of you crumbling. She tends to avoid the area as much as she can. She will never admit the reason out loud though. Even she has limits, and after all she's lived and done, she doesn't need any more reminders of how dire the situation is, nor the inevitable drain of energy she always feels in that place. But saying it out loud ? No one needs that. Everyone needs her strong and unshakeable. Not fair, but she learnt that hardly anything is fair in life when she was sixteen. She's learnt to accept it. Kind of
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Dive now. 3/?
anonymous
September 13 2015, 17:43:24 UTC
It always pains him when she does that though. Her moments of doubts are so obvious and she still feels the obligation to hide them from him even if she knows very well he's the last person she could fool. Even after all these years, he still feels like she inevitably slips out of his grasp every time she needs to not be alone the most. It frustrates him to no end. Sure, this war is hard on everyone, and it's taking its toll on him too. But at times like these, he wishes she would lean on him a little more. As it is, he feels even more useless. A part of him is disgusted that he'd like her to depend on him more for his own benefit. He feels selfish
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Dive now. 4/?
anonymous
September 13 2015, 18:12:08 UTC
Two rounds of liquor, a couple of demonstration vids and a good amount of questions later, Garrus has a good idea oh what hypnosis actually is. It helps that turians also have an uncouncious part to their brain, but the fact that humans have found such a simple way to access and manipulate it is new. He never heard of such a thing in his own species. Humans. Will wonders ever cease
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Dive now. 5/?
anonymous
September 13 2015, 18:13:32 UTC
His grin is infectious and she relaxes a bit, stops frowning. She shifts towards the corner of the couch, closer to him. She takes a deep breath to ease the nagging nervousness, and his smell washes over her, calming her. She closes her eyes briefly. When she opens them, she puts the hand closest to him on the back of his neck, and takes his hand with the other
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Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guillemet#Uses
anonymous
September 14 2015, 22:12:11 UTC
And further, the space between the guillemet and the text is classic French usage.
Indeed, while your English is very good, the subtle errors of grammar that remain indicate to me clearly that your name is Emilie, you live in La Rochelle above a boulangerie, but you were educated in Chicoutimi by nuns, who forced you to play outside in the cold Quebec winters.
Also, I am enjoying the story very much and encourage you to continue.
Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guillemet#Uses
anonymous
September 15 2015, 12:54:31 UTC
Hehe, Not to far from reality :) I did live in LR for a while! Though I never went to Canada, but I'd love to someday.
I'd love it if you could correct some of the biggest errors I made, it would help a lot. If you're willing and have the time, that is. I always appreciate having opportunities to improve my English.
Anyways, thanks a million for the praise and encouragement, it means a lot. I'm grinning like an idiot right now. ^^
Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guillemet#Uses
anonymous
September 15 2015, 17:29:53 UTC
I should make clear, I who speculates upon your La-Rochelle-ness, am not the same Anon as just above. Sorry for any confusion. For my part I just don't have time for proofreading but hopefully another anon will step up!
Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guillemet#Uses
anonymous
September 16 2015, 17:29:40 UTC
No problem :) I'm very happy to receive feedback anyway (I can live without corrections, as long as I don't make anyone's eyes bleed), and the more the merrier! ;)
Re: Dive now. 6/?
anonymous
September 14 2015, 19:48:37 UTC
Yeah, sorry, those were the default settings on my word processor. I changed it to English standards, but unfortunately I can't edit what's already posted. I didn't think it would get lost in translation. :/
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Indeed, while your English is very good, the subtle errors of grammar that remain indicate to me clearly that your name is Emilie, you live in La Rochelle above a boulangerie, but you were educated in Chicoutimi by nuns, who forced you to play outside in the cold Quebec winters.
Also, I am enjoying the story very much and encourage you to continue.
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I'd love it if you could correct some of the biggest errors I made, it would help a lot. If you're willing and have the time, that is. I always appreciate having opportunities to improve my English.
Anyways, thanks a million for the praise and encouragement, it means a lot. I'm grinning like an idiot right now. ^^
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