What Really Happened in Ireland

[massopiod]

Here you go.  
Here are two versions of the beginning of the saga... tell me which one you like better.  
Any comments or suggestions, please feel free.

DISCLAIMER: If you don't want to read about sorta graphic sex, or are under the age of 18, please read version two and don't sue me.

Version One: "A Religious Break"

I had terrible nightmares last

Comments

[taxishoes]

I can't say which I like better because the second one has so many holes. But I'm enjoying 'em.

[chansondespoir]

I agree with Ren. Also, version one seems more you. I guess you put more of your Gabrielle vivacity in it. I heard this story (in less graphic detail) right afterwards when you came to visit...but I still enjoyed reading it.

[orpheuskiss]

i say you combine them and make an extra-super 3rd version! or if not go with the 1st version because i agree with hope that the 1st one seems more "you."