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mcmm1

What? part 1

Dec 22, 2011 00:15

rating: pg ( for now C:)
pairings: i cant tell you because i mean
description: hahaha its a fan fiction you never know whats going to happen True Story ;)

Ian's pov
i was walking though the halls of my grubby hight school looking for Anthony my best friend where are you dummy ! "Anth-" i stoped i saw he was with that stupid cheerleader again even tho ( Read more... )

there will be fluff !

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:) mcmm1 January 5 2012, 21:34:31 UTC

thanks for the help im not the best speller in the world and when i wrote this i was really tired and i was sickish so that why i didnt proof read it and im glad you like PG (for now) and thanks for liking my music choice i dont under stand the lyrics also but its an awesome song :)

oh annnd mcmm1 January 5 2012, 21:35:29 UTC

the other parts are up now if you would like to read them

michaelangelo24 January 5 2012, 22:35:01 UTC

Don't hate me for saying this, but your fic needs some work. The plot itself is fine and so are the characters; however, grammatically it is all over the place. I have a few suggestions to help you with your writing. You should use spell-check to catch most of the errors. If you are directly typing this in livejournal, just paste it in Word to check for errors. I also strongly recommend using periods to break up sentences. There are a lot of run-on sentences and they are very distracting. If you find yourself using "and" in a sentence more than once, stick in some periods. Also, it's common practice to start a new paragraph whenever someone new speaks. It will make your writing seem less crowded if you do that. Hopefully my tips help. Please don't take this all the wrong way; I just want to help. :)

thanks mcmm1 January 5 2012, 22:47:38 UTC

thanks :) i needed to know what i need to do and know i know so thank you and i would never hate you.You are one of my favorite Ianthony writers

Re: thanks michaelangelo24 January 5 2012, 22:53:48 UTC

Hopefully you'll be writing some epic fics soon with those tips. :)

Re: thanks mcmm1 January 5 2012, 22:56:47 UTC

i hope so to :)btw i love your story Second Chances

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cookieluvr1124 January 7 2012, 04:22:47 UTC

this was pretty amazing as firstish fics go.
I have always wanted to write a school fic but I am addicted to song fics
lol
i cant really criticize about your spelling, because im dyslexic and can't spell well sometimes but all great minds have a flaw. I will be expecting some great stories soon...
:)

oh wow mcmm1 January 7 2012, 07:35:48 UTC

thanks this is so nice of you im glad you liked it :)