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[heartsunite]

Title: Hearts of Ice. [1/1]
Author: heartsunite
Pairing: GerardxFrank
Rating: PG
Summary: Frank finds an unused ice tray, and a couple of chances pass him by.
Dedication/Beta: None.
Disclaimer: I only own the order of the words.

Comments

[whatsername_d]

it's hard to read without double-spacing. D;

[heartsunite]

Oh no, I didn't realize that. Thanks for telling me, next time I'll make sure I use double spacing.

[omgrun]

I think this whole story would make a lot more sense if you changed
this line:
"Turns out that a chance wasn’t the only thing that’d slipped through his fingers today."
to
"Turns out that the water wasn't the only thing that'd slipped through his fingers today."
And then the reader has to realise by his/her self.
Plus, it continues with the theme.
I LOVE this concept might I add. I can see it happening. It's a beautiful idea, amazing use of symbolism. I can see that you're definately going to be a first-rate writer in this fandom, soon enough!

[heartsunite]

thankyou so much!
:)