The New Adventures of McShutup (#1 in a series of 1)

[mcshutup]

In one of the strip malls I pass on my paper routes, there is a porn/adult novelty store called Adam and Eve. Nearby, there is a Christian bookstore called Agape.

So, there's that.

Comments

[kanino]

Hah!

haha

[shshaw_shshaw]

irony is a cruel snake
with many bitter herbs
and spices

hahaha

xo!

[privatelyricist]

Hope you don't find this intrusive but its a piece I didn't really wanna share with my LJ/HHV, but thought you might be interested in

[mcshutup]

Heh....nice concept, the contrast of personalities and rhyme styles makes it work, especially how your lines draw meanings together on a second or third read, while Doomz is trying to clarify with basic advice. It's a song i almost have to come at sideways, because it starts out telling a story and by the end both of yoru perspectives have changed somewhat. Makes for something unique in it's sum.

she politely declines
And does it all in one line, with words you'd define as
kindness, and i mind this because she's not mine

Price is paid, so I'll cross it off the list I'd
Like to get revenge but I'm not angry at this chick

and Doomz ender

Though you're already burned, all hope, it ain't lost
Gotta figure out the steps, match em up with the cost

...is my favorite.

listen up bro, i'm cold like a freezer in the winter
Don't let her burn you, turn your body into cindersI like how many approaches were fit into a few lines, both of you using humor and considering your situation from a few angles. I dunno, seems like it would be the

[privatelyricist]

Ironic thing is this was a genuine discussion but I just happened to be describing feeling like poop through rhyme form and he was genuinely trying to give advice

this is just how we talk hahah

long time dogg

[lowkey_renegade]

DUDE!!! i hope you get this... i was just thinkin bout all the people i used to consort with on LJ and you popped up. whats been up?! i feel like i haven't talked to anyone on here in forever. but for real... what have you been up 2?

[rapsbabyboy]

so when you gon put up some audio?