Recipient: erised1810 Prompt: post-GoF, Hermione visits Viktor Word count: 100 on the nose Rating: G. Fluffity Mc Fluffs-a-lot
Hermione stepped off the train in Sofia, and looked around. She was supposed to meet Viktor here for a summer trip, but she didn't see him anywhere. Her parents had thought it best that she take a break, when she had come home so upset after Cedric's death. When she told her mother about Viktor, the woman had immediately packed her off to Bulgaria.
Not that Hermione minded, especially when she caught site of Viktor. The smile on his face matched the one hers, and caused her heart to skip a beat.
Great drabble. Cute fluff, though I am surprised at mommy Dentist sending her 15- [nearly 16, I guess]-year-old off to be with her [famous slightly-older athlete] [boyfriend? Yule date?].
I did catch: "The smile on his face matched the one hers"--needs to be "the one on hers". The best way to keep it at 100 would be to take "when she had come home" and make it "when she'd come home".
It was more of a willing suspension of disbelief sort of thing, and since post-GOF was requested... *shrug*
thank you for pointing that out, though i'm not overly concerned about keeping it at 100 words. I was just amused that I did it without really trying. *shrug*
Prompt: post-GoF, Hermione visits Viktor
Word count: 100 on the nose
Rating: G. Fluffity Mc Fluffs-a-lot
Hermione stepped off the train in Sofia, and looked around. She was supposed to meet Viktor here for a summer trip, but she didn't see him anywhere. Her parents had thought it best that she take a break, when she had come home so upset after Cedric's death. When she told her mother about Viktor, the woman had immediately packed her off to Bulgaria.
Not that Hermione minded, especially when she caught site of Viktor. The smile on his face matched the one hers, and caused her heart to skip a beat.
This was going to be a good summer.
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I did catch: "The smile on his face matched the one hers"--needs to be "the one on hers". The best way to keep it at 100 would be to take "when she had come home" and make it "when she'd come home".
Darling story.
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thank you for pointing that out, though i'm not overly concerned about keeping it at 100 words. I was just amused that I did it without really trying. *shrug*
thank you.
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