This is draft #2 and it's due on the 14th. Please let me know if you think that some part isn't clear such as who is talking; grounding issues like that
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Oh, hm. What was the prompt? Your narrator is likeable in all his crazy. Do you just want it for places that didn't make sense? I only ran into a couple.
I hope when I get to the very end, final death still has some of the charm that being alive had,
Everything besides bodily hard because that's what ended threw me into this mess.
anddd I think the second time the gargolyes get brought up you shouldn't say it's a bad idea again because it's a little repetitive.
The prompt was: write a short story. I wrote two and this is the one I decided the edit down first for the final.
Thank you so much for reading this. It's a ton of help to have somebody, especially somebody that reads as much as you do, look over my work. Maybe I'll post some more.
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I hope when I get to the very end, final death still has some of the charm that being alive had,
Everything besides bodily hard because that's what ended threw me into this mess.
anddd I think the second time the gargolyes get brought up you shouldn't say it's a bad idea again because it's a little repetitive.
but i like it. i supppooseee i just want more.
jay, i like your writing.
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Thank you so much for reading this. It's a ton of help to have somebody, especially somebody that reads as much as you do, look over my work. Maybe I'll post some more.
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