i agree w/ jessie (on all 3 things she said) and also i think there should be another comma in the first sentence after "band" so there's parallel structure.
The tears that poured down each senior’s face stabbed my heart as my own eyes welled in sadness
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i love it
and i love you for loving marching band!
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The tears that poured down each senior’s face stabbed my heart as my own eyes welled in sadness
that's my favorite sentence. ♥
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