Comments | mercerluver: New story!

mercerluver

New story!

Dec 26, 2005 12:50

Well this is a new Garrett story. It's called Belligerent. I'll continue on with both stories though so no worries. Anywho, Here's chapter one! Enjoy!

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Chapter One-It's your dream.

"Are you serious?! You found someone in L.A. that I can room with until I find my own place?" I squealed into the phone.

"Uh.. yeah I did!" She replied.

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Comments 12

behindgrey_eyes December 26 2005, 23:29:02 UTC

OOh! Thats grand...Thanks for telling me...=) I shall try keep up! =P

xx

sheld0n December 27 2005, 00:59:19 UTC

Ditto as the person above me! (:

__katreusaki December 27 2005, 03:10:50 UTC

Room 26. *cough* Yeah. Coincidence? I think not.
I'm not that big on m/f fics, or ones out a star and an OC for that matter, but I Garrett fan is a Garrett fan and I applaud your work and wish you luck in the future.

P.S. With hair like that just nod your head and bring Garrett to his knees. kthxbai

stormshadow21 December 27 2005, 06:14:52 UTC

Thanks for letting me know. Comments on your journal are fun-diddly-un!

I could go for some more character development and description, but hey, it's only the first chapter so I won't complain too much. I'm just a sucker for imagery. And witty conversation. You've got the conversation part down, so I'm happy. I'm sort of confused WHY you chose to leave a comment on MY journal. I completely forget which post I commented on in the Garrett journal. Oh well. I must be interesting or something. LOL! No harm done. Comments are fantastic! Toodles!

brightest_blue December 27 2005, 14:15:08 UTC

Hey! You hunted down my journal and left a comment, so I thought I'd come over and take a peek. Two Garrett stories at once? I can't even write one at a time, lol.

Great dialogue! One of my pet peeves is unrealistic dialogue when you KNOW people don't really talk like that.

If you want to post to a comm, or someplace besides your own journal, you might consider getting a beta, someone who can look it over before you post. I always use at least two. I'll volunteer, although I'll have to let you know upfront, that I don't have the fastest turnaround time. Annoying things like real life and such. :-)

Good stuff. Keep it coming!