Fanfic: For what it's worth, Chapter 3/?

[merlebelacqua]

Chapter 3: Scratching the surface

Jack didn’t sleep during this night, pacing through the city, sorting his doubts and filing them away for future use. He knew that, if he thought too much about the risks of this deal, he would not be able to accept it. He couldn’t let his pride get in his way now, not when there was so much to be gained.

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Comments

[adafrog]

Oh no Jack! This guy creeps me out. Great job.

[merlebelacqua]

Thank you. And yeah, he has to be quite creepy, otherwise Jack wouldn't be scared of him. Which would only be half as much fun.

[nnwest]

I think the suspense is going to kill me, judging by how wound up I am after reading this bit. For the sake of my dubious sanity, I hope there's another piece soon.

I'm liking this a lot. The atmosphere of tension you paint is rather compelling. Nicely done.

[merlebelacqua]

No, don't die! *lol*
I'll try to have another chapter up by Wednesday, but I think it will be a bit more complicated from here on. I've never written smut before, and I want it to be scary, which is even more complicated when you're writing from the 'victim's' perspective.
Anyway, thank you for the compliment, I'll do my best!

[cyberducks]

That guy gives me the heebiejeebies - I really don't know whether I can continue to read this, sadism is not my thing at all. I wish Jack had said no.

[merlebelacqua]

Sorry to hear this. I would have put a warning at the beginning of the first chapter, but I wasn't quite sure where the story would be going at that point. I still don't know how explicit later scenes are going to be.

[cyberducks]

I hope you realize that my comment wasn't meant as a criticism to your writing and your story - I rather like your story, it's very involving. But I am rather a wimp and only like the wimps version of bondage - very vanilla and painfree, and this seems to be heading more towards the hardcore and torture.

[merlebelacqua]

Don't worry, I understood it as that. And yeah, this is heading in a very dark direction, so you might want to be careful. :)

[ladykoori]

Congrats on creating a truely creepy character. *shudders*

Very much looking forward to the next part. I get the distinct impression Jack is going to need a hug when all is said and done.

[merlebelacqua]

Thanks very much! You should check out the Outlander books, I think Hughes is still tame in comparison to Cpt. Jack Randall.
Oh yeah, this won't be easy for Jack, poor guy. Maybe I'll find someone to comfort him later on.

[enchantersnight]

eeek getting really worried now!

[merlebelacqua]

And quite right too. :/