creative writing homework. criticism appreciated

[merryalice]

Two Worlds

Comments

[jesusfreak242]

Wow, I love it.

[lennyiam]

Mary Alice i dont know what you were talking about when you said it wasnt any good. it was so good that i even turned my music off so that i could concentrate, i never turn the music off! if what you said last night about everytime you rewrite it it gets worse is true, then the first copy would have been unreadable, thats how good it must have been! i absolutely LOVE your story! a few parts sound kind of familiar!!

[merryalice]

you are too cute! best of jimmy fallon tonight!!!!

[lipsticked456]

oh this is written so well!

[rockerbaby1473]

I already told you today how much I loved your story, but I'll tell you again. It's awesome, and I love how Abby and Jessica are the only complete people and then at the end it's only Jessica. You're brilliant!!