Brigit's Flame March 2011 First entry: Sashay

[merthin]

March sighs in bright sun
Curved hips sashay in spring dress
Nights burn my bedroom.

Comments

[keppiehed]

I am so pleased to see haiku here. You have done it justice. Thank you for sharing this underused art form!

[merthin]

Thank you. I appreciate the brevity required for this particular style. Unfortunately, it feels a bit staccato to me which I think is fine for the form, but misses the feel for "sashay". *shrug* Oh well. Perhaps I'll do better next time. - Thank you for reading and commenting.

[merthin]

Alas, it is still snowing (as of last night, anyway) here in Wisconsin, but the sashay of the female hip when appropriately attired can often cause the male of the species to drive their vehicles up light-poles. It's what sprang to mind at the prompt, anyway. As for the last line... it is a pleasing thought, anyway. :-) - Thank you for reading and commenting.

[eiremauve]

Oh, pretty! I love haikus, and this is very evocative.