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FMA BBC: Estvarya, Chapter 6

May 10, 2011 22:45

Title: Estvarya
Author: mfelizandyGenre: Drama. Written for the 2010-2011 FMA Big Bang Challenge ( Read more... )

Comments 9

bay115 May 11 2011, 21:16:05 UTC

Ouch on the accusations over Roy. Understandable if they thought he would rape, kidnap and other things, but it's still crazy. @_@ At least he acknowledges the accusation of him burning a lot of the people and left the survivors with nothing. His punishment (the scars on his face) is also quite interesting. I expected the Elders to say that Roy has been punished already with his sight gone.

I'm now curious over what happens next. Looking forward to more of this story!

Roy the Scapegoat mfelizandy May 12 2011, 16:43:47 UTC

It was supposed to be a trial (of sorts) based entirely on Roy's personal sins and crimes, but given all the pent-up resentment and rage among the Ishvarun, it was sort of inevitable that he'd end up standing in for the entire Amestrian military. His blindness accounted for his own actions, but there were plenty of people willing to do far worse. The Elders headed that off by slashing him across the face and turning him into the self-propelled symbol of the sealed end of the war. There are levels of meaning beyond that, of course, because just about everything the Elders do in their official capacities is designed to make the younger generations stop and think.

As for what happens next--well, I do have the outlines of it plotted. Roy's going to have his hands full, to put it mildly.

liviface May 15 2011, 20:29:06 UTC

Ooooh, this story is so good! It just keeps getting better and better, and updates have become the highlight of my week (to be fair, doing nothing but revise for upcoming exams does not provide many highlights of its own, but still). I loved this chapter, and the one before it. It was painful to read all the anger and hatred directed at Roy, but also completely understandable given everything that's happened. All in all, I feel like the Ishballans are being really quite fair in their treatment of Roy, and in this chapter it seems that some of them are beginning to develop some kind of grudging respect towards him. I don't really know how I feel about Roy getting his face cut, the superficial part of me was like: arghhh, noooo, my favourite character's pretty face! D: (while the even *more* superficial part of me was like: well... those scars *so* sound like they'll be kinda cool...) and the vaguely sensible part of my mind was happy that the Ishballans had officially ended the war and thought that the symbolism of the Elder's actions ( ... )

My superficial fangirl had the same thoughts! mfelizandy May 16 2011, 17:31:49 UTC

I have a soft spot for Roy myself, and the thought of marring his good looks almost made me change the Elders' decision on his sentence. (Though I have to say I like Patch-Roy from the first anime, too.) The symbolism won out, and gave me a way to set up later scenes.

I'm so glad you're still looking forward to new installments! I spend my commute plotting and deciding how to arrange events to keep things interesting and plausible.

The Ishvarun are slowly developing some respect for Roy, if for nothing but his sheer nerve. Weapons-grade alchemist or not, he's blind and alone in foreign territory, among people he knew very well wouldn't be happy to see him. He's also not desecrated the temple, tried to enslave the entire population, or roasted babies for breakfast, any of which most Ishvarun would consider entirely in keeping with the nature of an Amestrian State Alchemist. The Elders are playing a serious strategy game, handling multiple sides of multiple arguments. They pretty much had to do something painful to Roy, ( ... )

floranna May 21 2011, 19:04:20 UTC

Well, considering that I have a weird fetish with scars (especially if they are in the face) this chapter made me keen. Roy with a Iruka-style scar is ab awesome image. ^^'

This trial is very believable in ...pretty much everything. It's how everything would probably go down, if you had a bunch of people you've hurt terribly, and the leaders who want to move forward with the minimum of bloodshed. And as I said before, a new scar. Hurrurrur.

I checked out the weaver-womans tale in your glossary, and that story is just fascinating. I love how much work you all have just put in to this verse and the other fic (well, the history and the culture IS the same, so...). Oh shit, that reminds me, I should comment on it. Probably not today, though. ^^'

So, all in all: Please continue soon!

Someone's reading the Glossary! Yay! floranna May 26 2011, 14:22:42 UTC

Hello again--sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you! Between things going bonkers at work and juggling a frantic last few weeks in RL, I haven't had time to do more than check my email and feed my fish. Hoping to get another chapter ready for posting this weekend ( ... )

Oops mfelizandy May 26 2011, 14:24:20 UTC

Sorry--forgot to log in before posting the reply!

kashicat June 24 2011, 01:21:12 UTC

I'm curious why you had Nikai do so much of what Rehana did in the original. I thought it was very cool that a woman had so much authority among the Elders.

I'm juggling Elders... mfelizandy June 28 2011, 03:26:12 UTC

I decided there ought to be more Elders in a community the size of Xerxes, and in adding a few more Elders their roles got reshuffled. The internal politics can be more complicated when I'm not plotting on the fly! :) Rehena's not getting sidelined, despite appearances. She's going to make some of her own moves in later chapters.