This was just lovely. I liked the way you wove real issues of the day-to-day running of a kingdom and a massive illness into the story. I liked the soft, darkish tone of the fic. I LOVED Arthur figuring things out! Oh, and ending...! I always knew I needed something like that in my life, but I hadn't been able to find it before. Where have you been all my life, you wonderful writer you? Also, the way you mention some little details (example: Arthur lifting his hips to pull off the nightgown when you could have just said he took it off)? VERY YES. It made the fic really, um, tactile? Realistic? I dunno the word. Sensual, maybe.
It was a bit, um, monologue-y at places, and there were some incredibly thick paragraphs in some spots. That's my only complaint.
What a wonderful comment to receive! I am glad that you enjoyed the things that worked and that you let me know what didn't, so that if I try again I may be able to overcome some of the problems. I spent over a month in panic because I thought that I would never have the required 30,000 words. Since I started somewhere near the middle and jumped around (I knew what each section would be so I wrote what worked each time I sat down to keep from being blocked) I wonder if those sections were some of the earlier ones. I'll have to look back and see about that since I still have my original order written in Scrivener. You have certainly given me something to strive for. Thank you!
I'm so glad I've found your fic! It was very deep, with profound thoughts on how Uther made his kingdom weaker by banning magic, as well as glimpses of Camelot under Arthur's reign. I liked to be the wistness of Arthur's journey towards the acceptance of magic and the acceptance of his feelings for Merlin, and also towards the king he wishes to become. What I also liked is that what makes Arthur and Merlin complete each other was very well expressed in your story. The end was perfect, with Arthur beginning a physical journey towards Merlin after completing the spiritual one. Finally, kudos on writing a non-magic reveal scene. That was absolutely great and felt very right. And it was so good to have Hunith featured. I adore her.
Wow! Your comment just blows me away. This being my first outing in public with my writing I am still very nervous about it. It's awesome to try to do something then for someone to tell me that they got it! I don't know what to say, except to thank you.
As for a sequel. I told my cheerleader while I was writing it that season three would be the sequel. I have since seen season 3 and feel that I may have to correct that thought and fix what they messed up, so maybe.
*beams* Gotta say that you have made my day and it had been sliding toward becoming sucky. I think I'll just wade through the sucky part with a smile now, thanks to you.
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I liked the way you wove real issues of the day-to-day running of a kingdom and a massive illness into the story.
I liked the soft, darkish tone of the fic.
I LOVED Arthur figuring things out! Oh, and ending...! I always knew I needed something like that in my life, but I hadn't been able to find it before. Where have you been all my life, you wonderful writer you?
Also, the way you mention some little details (example: Arthur lifting his hips to pull off the nightgown when you could have just said he took it off)? VERY YES. It made the fic really, um, tactile? Realistic? I dunno the word. Sensual, maybe.
It was a bit, um, monologue-y at places, and there were some incredibly thick paragraphs in some spots. That's my only complaint.
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What I also liked is that what makes Arthur and Merlin complete each other was very well expressed in your story.
The end was perfect, with Arthur beginning a physical journey towards Merlin after completing the spiritual one.
Finally, kudos on writing a non-magic reveal scene. That was absolutely great and felt very right.
And it was so good to have Hunith featured. I adore her.
Did you write a sequel?
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As for a sequel. I told my cheerleader while I was writing it that season three would be the sequel. I have since seen season 3 and feel that I may have to correct that thought and fix what they messed up, so maybe.
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Yes please, do fix what they messed up :o)
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