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micehell

(Fic) Heirs of a Cold War (part 4 (END))

Oct 21, 2012 18:16

Fandom: TOKIO RPS
Title: Heirs of a Cold War
Category: AU, drama, supernatural, some humor
Pairing: Gen (Gussan's only 19 in this which means Nagase's only 12, so while I won't promise that in my head Nagase's not got a crush, Gussan's just seeing a kid ;)
Rating: PG-13 for language and a little violence in later chapters
Warnings: None.
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Comments 3

hannah_arashi October 22 2012, 03:16:05 UTC

i love love love love love you!!! I can't say it enough~ This was completely worth the wait sweetie ~^^~ it was absolutely fabulous!! I wish I had something more substantial to say besides wow... bu thats all my sick mind can process at the moment... so anyway incredible... wow... I love it so much~~ I am so glad I got to read this today~ it made my day better~~ <3

micehell October 22 2012, 21:35:28 UTC

This was completely worth the wait
Ah, that's a relief! I really did think most people (besides me, at any rate) had forgotten it by this point. ;)

I wish I had something more substantial to say besides wow
Just knowing you liked it is awesome for me, yays!

my sick mind
I hope it's the good kind of sick ('cause those of us with naughty minds ought to stick together ;), but if it's the other, I hope you feel better soon, missy!

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micehell October 26 2012, 02:07:42 UTC

YOU FINALLY FINISHED IT
IT'S A FREAKING MIRACLE! ;)

did you change out all the stuff you didn't like
It wasn't really the plot that bothered me when it came down to it (which was good, since I'd had that down from the beginning!), but rather the way I was telling it, which was way more tell than show. Sadly, even after fixing a bunch of that, it was still a little too heavy on the tell side of things, but it was getting soooo long. ;) What it basically did, besides making a couple of things awkward, was that it shortchanged Mabo's & Nagase's characters a little and Taichi's & Leader's characters a lot, but since I'm an overly detailed writer (so many asides!), I'm hoping they balanced it out a little. *snork* Ah, well, such is life.

I will admit I laughed at the fact that his "power" ended up including so much fail!nessMabo's & Nagase's were easy, 'cause they're from shows, and Gussan's was, oddly if obviously enough, based on his dog, but I actually based the other two's powers on themselves - Leader's disappearing act that the ( ... )