For aerye: "The Evening and the Morning" (Wilby Wonderful) by Dira

[midsummer_fic]

Title: The Evening and the Morning
Author: dsudis
Fandom: Wilby Wonderful
Recipient: aerye
Rating: NC-17
Summary: The second day.

Comments

[lipsum]

> Dan stood still for a minute, watching him go in helpless appreciation of Wilby's very own living white-hatted cowboy, and then Duck said softly, in his ear, "I had a crush on him since I was eight years old."

hee! <3

> and Duck was still wearing the same flashing-bright smile that had never told Dan so much as his name, out there under the trees at night.

ahhh :) excellent detail. I like the way it adds to the earlier detail about his smile.

> the seatbelt that had clearly last been used by someone a hell of a lot shorter than himself

okay, more excellent detail :)

> Dan listened to his footsteps retreating through the house, losing them in the creak of the trees and the sound of water--not the ocean, but the river, rushing along somewhere nearby. It wasn't a big island, but Duck had still found a place to be lonely on it.

yay, detail!

> The kind who might be thoughtful in funny ways, like knowing where downwind was, and standing there to smoke.

cowboy <3

[dsudis]

Yay cowboys! Thanks for your feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[sageness]

Oh, beautiful. I love how Duck makes room for Dan in his life without it being all that big a deal, even though it really is.

[dsudis]

Thanks! I have this thing about "But what would really happen...?" and the difficulty they have in this story was one of my answers. *g*

[lynnmonster]

Oh, my. This is just perfect. Absolutely perfect.

[dsudis]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it!

[sweetvalleyslut]

I love this so much, because it's not a perfect happy ending--there's all the fear of the rest of the town, and the nervousness about where exactly their relationship is going--and that just makes it a lot more real, a lot more moving, to me.

[dsudis]

Thank you! From the first time I saw the movie, I was interested in the kinds of imperfectly happy endings that might be waiting for Duck and Dan--I'm glad you enjoyed this one!

[lilac_one]

This is beautiful. I love how you've captured the tone of the movie. It's real life, but quiet. When writing post-WW fic, I think it's easy to overlook the fact that in the movie, homosexuality is not acceptable to a large part of the island, and that people can be stupid, ignorant, and violent. You illustrate that so well in the references to the locked doors and windows. I also love how Duck and Dan respond.

I also especially love the last line.

[dsudis]

Thank you! I really try to take a "realistic" tack when I write, trying to deal with the obstacles characters face--I'm glad you enjoyed this!