Comments | mikiya2200: Clowns to the left of me

mikiya2200

Clowns to the left of me

Jan 23, 2011 02:18

“Sam?”

He shifts.

“Sammy?”

It’s cold.

“How are you holding up?”

He turns his head, frowns.

Holding up?

“Sam.”

Something touches his shoulder and he shifts his weight to the side, turning his face in the direction of the voice. His eyes are closed and it’s dark.

When did he close his eyes?

“Sam.”

The voice belongs to his father, it’s closer now ( Read more... )

spn sam, fanfiction, spn john, supernatural, h/c, one-shots

Comments 36

borgmama1of5 January 23 2011, 05:00:52 UTC

Gasping for breath!

I was with Sammy for every word of this!

Can I beg you to write the aftermath--get him on some good drugs? It's cruel to leave him like this!

mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 12:41:57 UTC

Well, maybe if I feel the need for some doped-up-Sammy in the near future I'll take this setting for an aftermath-piece... But, really, don't worry, I promise you once he wakes up he won't be in any pain at all! ;)

Thanks!

kiscinca January 23 2011, 10:57:42 UTC

Aww, what a lovely fic to read in the morning. Thanks so much for this! Loved the dynamics between the two of them and concerned/worried John trying to keep Sam awake.

And the leg injury sounded painful. But hey you know me and my love for hurt!Sam. lol

Thanks again, you made my day. :-)

mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 12:40:14 UTC

I know you wanted concussion!sam and the other story has... well, had that, but, well, apparently my computer didn't want you to read it. :(

I've had a leg injury once and it sucked, though I didn't have to keep standing, don't think I would have been able to do that.

Glad you liked it, really! :)

Well, I don't know why I came here tonight, / I've got a feeling that something ain't right... ramblin_rosie January 23 2011, 11:23:32 UTC

Two nitpicks: the third line of the chorus is "Here I am, stuck in the middle with you," and it's by Stealers Wheel, not Bob Dylan. [/oldies fan who now has the song stuck in her head :D]
That said:
OWWWWWW! Poor Sam! No good deed goes unpunished, huh? And the song really does fit the situation. Good thing John was there for him!

Re: Well, I don't know why I came here tonight, / I've got a feeling that something ain't right... mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 12:25:48 UTC

Oh my god, you're right about the song... I was googling for something with "stuck with you" since I had that in my head while writing it and one of the pages that turned up had Bob Dylan as performer so I just used that and didn't really check. Thanks for pointing that out, I'm not so much a fan of oldies, though I do like some of them. I corrected the lyrics, thanks for that! :)

And isn't it alway like this, you do something nice for someone and get punished for it somehow? ;) And John being there for him, well, there aren't enough stories out there that have that... :)

Thank you!

phorenice January 23 2011, 18:39:10 UTC

Awesome fic!
I love Sam's voice in this, and (like everybody else it seems) that it's a moment between Sam and John without fighting, a moment that shows that there's love between them, with John worrying and Sam finding comfort in his presence. Also, I don't know if I should laugh or cry about Sam feeling guilty for being so tall.

mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 19:17:42 UTC

Thank you!
You know, I really do believe that Sam and John had a lot of those moments (not necessarily moments where Sam was hurt and John had to care for him, but both of them completely relaxed with each other), I mean I had a hard time with my parents when I was growing up and it's easier to remember what went wrong but that doesn't mean I didn't have good times. I think it's just not that interesting or exciting for most authors to write about the good times...
Btw, concerning the height, I think Sam is ignoring the fact that his height was actually making it easier for John to hold him up, if he had been shorter John would have had to crouch awkwardly to hold him up, not sure if he could have done that for as long as he did here... (And maybe I'm overthinking again... ;) )

phorenice January 23 2011, 19:32:38 UTC

Well, when you've been pinned to a wall by an angry ghost with a pitchfork I guess you're allowed a few logic errors...

And I love that scene in Dead Man's Blood: "Hey Dad, what happened to that college fund?" - "Spent it on ammo."
I think it shows that they are able to get along.

mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 23:21:35 UTC

Oh yes, that's one of my all-time-favorite scenes with them, I just LOVE the way they laugh, both of them... It's such a wonderful peaceful scene... And yes, I do think they can get along just well, not everything in life is about being the one who is always right.

saberivojo January 23 2011, 22:09:16 UTC

Great job. It's good to see John taking care of Sam. *deep sigh*

mikiya2200 January 23 2011, 23:11:54 UTC

You know, right now I'd be happy if just about anybody would take care of Sam, so why not have John do it? ;) Glad you enjoyed! :)

saberivojo January 23 2011, 23:56:08 UTC

'Cause John is da bomb!