Miscalculation -HiruMamo-

[minimuse_chan]

 She was gone.

She was fucking gone.

There was something about the thought that left him both numb and angry.

But he wasn’t sad.

It wasn’t like they’d promised to be together forever or anything, nor was it a particularly dramatic close to their ‘relationship’. She went to study in America and he…

…he was where he’d always been

Comments

[bifacial_ler]

Heh, nice. Welcome to HiruMamo comm. )))

I like it, even though there are still things to work on. In my opinion Mamori was slightly OC, but your Hiruma is brilliant.))
And omake is so sweetly cracky!))

If you need any help - just ask.))
BTW, there is a thing called lj-cut, helping you to hide your text behind the link.
You do it like that: put < lj-cut > before the passage you want to hide and < /lj-cut > after. (just don't forget to take out the spaces )

[minimuse_chan]

Thank you very much!! ^_^ I'm happy you liked it =3

I didn't really like how I did Mamori either >.> (I kinda rushed it because I had to go to Tae Kwon Do ^^;) yay! I was worried 'bout my Hiruma! ^___^ (wasn't sure if I was makin' him evil enough XD lol)

Thank you!! (puts information away for future use) -glomp-

Thanks again for the wonderful comment!!
-Muse-chan feeling bubbly.

[icyblu24]

Welcome to HiruMamo! XD This is getting very interesting, in a angst/bitter/angry way. 3 emotions I love to play around with myself! LOL! The only advice I have to give, is don't let Hiruma become to angry, and don't let Mamori become too harsh. XD Please continue!

[minimuse_chan]

'Kay! Thank you very much!!! =3

[dayofcaligula]

Hm, I didn't know if it was just me or Hiruma seemed like he was in delirium. Mamori was a bit of an apathetic person. I really like your concept on miscalculation though and omake's really funny.

[minimuse_chan]

Lol, really ^^; probably. Thank you very much for the advice! (and sorry for the late reply!)

Beautiful!!!

[g3nny]

:D Good job, this fanfic is so sweet :3