[Oneshot/G/HaeRy] Only For Me To See

[minusculity]

Title: Only For Me To See
Genre: Romance
Characters: Donghae; Henry; Ryeowook
Pairing: HaeRy [ Donghae x Henry ] 
Rating: G
Current Status:Oneshot complete. ( there might be a sequel ) Unbeta-ed.
Disclaimer: I own do not own Super Junior.
Prologue: It's been a few years since then but he and Zhoumi still face rejection.
Date of completion/Date of

Comments

[whisper_wisp]

HENHAE!!!!!//sobs forever/// I love you so much for writing henhae ;A; they are bros and best buds and partners in crime, yes they are!

this isn't too bad at all! I actually loved it a lot, there was some very sweet and heart-wrenching segments that tugged my heart strings. Some suggestions: use different descriptions. There are more words than one to describe "warm", so avoid repetition.
also, the change in POV was a little abrupt and confusing at first, but it would help if you put henry's thoughts in bold or italics, or anything to differentiate the shift.
Hugs are nice, comforting and powerful. It's just my thoughts, but I think just the hug is strong enough for your one-shot. but do write more henhae! 8DDD
;lkjasdf;kljadsf thanks so much for writing~

THANK YOU

[minusculity]

(((; Thank you so much for your comment~~!

I actually lost motivation in writing fanfiction but your comment has made me feel motivated again!

I see what you mean by using different and more expressive words rather than just repeating 'warm', and I understand the bold/italic stuff. (: Thank you for your comments, they give me something to work on!

HenHae is so cute right ;o;

Re: THANK YOU

[whisper_wisp]

YEAHHHH no problem! Henhae is cute and ugh it doesn't help that I'm incredibly hamster-biased.orz But good luck with writing! :3