Perfect Moment: Proud

[minyandu]

Title: Proud
Characters: Batman, Superman
Rating: G
Warnings: None needed. 
Summary: After the beginning of Teen Titan 1/2.
Word Count: 118
Notes: I use Perfect Moment as a test of my ability to write without mistake. Every chapter of this drabble series requires no knowledge of the previous one. I'll keep them short to focus on writing things correctly

Comments

[munnin_odanin]

*claps excitedly* Score one Dick! Trust him to be able to handle both sides.

Well done. You have a clean and crisp writing style I really enjoy reading.

[minyandu]

Thank you for your reply! *DANCE AROUND HAPPILY*
I was like "wait, wait. What just happened? Why everybody suddenly become reasonable again? God,Dick! You are AWESOME!". Then I just laughed like crazy for a good two minutes. I still have that goofy smile on my face now when I recall the scene.

[sara_lakali]

I found a couple of small mistakes.

No more yelling and shouting, no more wrestling and firing. I think there is a typo in the last word. Did you mean fighting?

The air was still strain, but the heat had gone away. There is a verb tense error. Strain should be strained. Also, the phrase is the atmosphere was strained. You can use air and still get your point across, but if you wanted to use the phrase the way it's normally said in English, use atmosphere.

I hope I wasn't too harsh. This is a lovely piece and a wonderful way to practice writing. :)

[minyandu]

Fixed it. Thank you for the help!!!:D

For the firing part, I remember that Starfire used energyblast on Diana and Kon used heat vision on Clark. So, firing should be OK, right? ( ⊙o⊙?)

[mithen]

Hee, Superman and Batman being proud of Dick and knowing he'll do well is so awesome...even if Bruce tries to hide it, Clark knows better. :)

[minyandu]

Clark can see the tiniese muscle movement around his lips. Right, Bruce? ;)