Oooh, this was spectacular. And so clever! I loved all about it. The plot was great, the time warping was fun and made sense, and there was the added bonus of bringing all the dead people back to life (and Owen doubly so!).
One thing that I noticed and that entertained me quite a lot was how the plot was carried by the women in your fic. It was Tosh who tried to escape, Amy who first decided to save her and the boys, Moshe who came to Earth to set the plan in motion. And Gwen had this really spectacular entrance that is usually reserved for people played by men such as Bruce Willis. Meanwhile Owen and Ianto were off doing womanly things such as bonding with children and trying to get over a lost lover. It made me snicker, but in a good way.
Haha. Er, I never actually thought of it that way! Now that you mention it, I can totally see it though. I just wanted to focus on in-character moments that aren't usually focused on. I love it when Owen's all doctor-y and caring, and I think Tosh, after her imprisonment by UNIT, would be most concerned with escaping. As for Ianto... I just kind of didn't know what to do with him after I shifted the focus to Tosh.
Gwen is simply badass. :)
But thanks a lot for the analysis. It's really interesting to find things I wasn't aware of writing!
Hee! One of the very first things I learned in literature class in college was that it does not matter at all whether something was put in a story consciously or not. The writers write it in a way they think will work for people, is all that matters. They can leave figuring out why that is to the literature researchers later. :D So no worry. It worked for me and here was why. ;)
I agree that Tosh's past would make her focus on escaping (well, that or curling up into a ball and sobbing!). The situation you put her in really works for her as a character.
Yup, that's about how I feel about it too. My current strategy is to agree with all theories and claim them as my own. >:D
Honestly I brought the focus around to Tosh because I have trouble writing her and I wanted to get over it. I kind of just threw scenes in with her whenever I thought I'd written too much Owen. I can't really see her curling up in a ball - even back in season one (Countrycide), she managed to keep calm and do her best to think rationally. By the time she dies, she's really not the kind to just sit and do nothing.
This was great. I loved your ideas, really interesting and tense. I kept feeling worried, and I loved how you resolved it all.
Everyone was very in character, which can't be easy, especially the Doctor, who was just right. I adored your OCs as well, especially little Moshe. Poor Ned, I knew he had to be a gonner.
I think maybe you need a warning about the scene near the beginning where Owen experiences his own post mortem. It was really squicky and I admit I skipped through it, but a warning for a bit of gore would have been appreciated.
This would make a great verse if you have the energy to write any more! I would love the team in space, and adore to meet Moshe again.
I actually wasn't planning on killing off Ned... I just sort of realized he wasn't important any more. And then it seemed like a very Doctor Who thing to do...
I will definitely add a warning. Sorry about that, I wrote that scene way at the beginning, so I sort of forgot about it.
Thanks, I just figure if I was disturbed enough to have to skim it then others would be, and I think it makes a difference because if you make it clear it's only in one section, it will mean people read on, I was so intrigued by your ideas by then that I kept going.
I must read your other stories, I'm sure I haven't seen them before!
Fantastic! I love this story! Everyone is so perfectly in character that I had no trouble hearing their voices in my head as I was reading. And I think I'll be rereading Jack's reunion scene many times...
I see you have written more fics that I will have to read as well. Mind if I friend you?
What a wonderful, wonderful story! I think this will be my new canon. Yep. They all lived happily ever after. Beautiful job writing and plotting and keeping all there wonderful characters spot on.
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One thing that I noticed and that entertained me quite a lot was how the plot was carried by the women in your fic. It was Tosh who tried to escape, Amy who first decided to save her and the boys, Moshe who came to Earth to set the plan in motion. And Gwen had this really spectacular entrance that is usually reserved for people played by men such as Bruce Willis. Meanwhile Owen and Ianto were off doing womanly things such as bonding with children and trying to get over a lost lover. It made me snicker, but in a good way.
Thanks for sharing this.
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Haha. Er, I never actually thought of it that way! Now that you mention it, I can totally see it though. I just wanted to focus on in-character moments that aren't usually focused on. I love it when Owen's all doctor-y and caring, and I think Tosh, after her imprisonment by UNIT, would be most concerned with escaping. As for Ianto... I just kind of didn't know what to do with him after I shifted the focus to Tosh.
Gwen is simply badass. :)
But thanks a lot for the analysis. It's really interesting to find things I wasn't aware of writing!
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Hee! One of the very first things I learned in literature class in college was that it does not matter at all whether something was put in a story consciously or not. The writers write it in a way they think will work for people, is all that matters. They can leave figuring out why that is to the literature researchers later. :D So no worry. It worked for me and here was why. ;)
I agree that Tosh's past would make her focus on escaping (well, that or curling up into a ball and sobbing!). The situation you put her in really works for her as a character.
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Honestly I brought the focus around to Tosh because I have trouble writing her and I wanted to get over it. I kind of just threw scenes in with her whenever I thought I'd written too much Owen. I can't really see her curling up in a ball - even back in season one (Countrycide), she managed to keep calm and do her best to think rationally. By the time she dies, she's really not the kind to just sit and do nothing.
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Everyone was very in character, which can't be easy, especially the Doctor, who was just right. I adored your OCs as well, especially little Moshe. Poor Ned, I knew he had to be a gonner.
I think maybe you need a warning about the scene near the beginning where Owen experiences his own post mortem. It was really squicky and I admit I skipped through it, but a warning for a bit of gore would have been appreciated.
This would make a great verse if you have the energy to write any more! I would love the team in space, and adore to meet Moshe again.
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I actually wasn't planning on killing off Ned... I just sort of realized he wasn't important any more. And then it seemed like a very Doctor Who thing to do...
I will definitely add a warning. Sorry about that, I wrote that scene way at the beginning, so I sort of forgot about it.
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I must read your other stories, I'm sure I haven't seen them before!
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I see you have written more fics that I will have to read as well. Mind if I friend you?
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Of course you can friend me! I never say no to friends. :)
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