Behold Mortals! The First Page of the First Story!

[misled_legend]

Okay fair warning.  I was tired when I started this and even as I wrote this it got odder and odder and since I usually go for 2000 to 3000 words a chapter it's still in progress (meaning like 3 pages)  As I wrote this I saw parts of myself in it especially the tripping on noithing.

Something tore me away from my slumber which was a mixed blessing

Comments

[achluomania]

It's alright :] the sentences get a little reptitive because most of them start with "I..." but I understand that, it's hard to do otherwise when writing in first person, but I suggest trying to mix it up a little. Also, you should go back and chec your grammar, but you could always do that when editing. Other than that it's pretty good :3 I wanna' read more lol

[misled_legend]

Yeah I'm working on a old version of Open office right now and I can't get a update since the original disc belongs to the store I got the used laptop from. Thanks I'll go over it later.

[bronzechimera]

I also want to read more!

Toward the beginning you wrote "I stumble out of bed", and I'm assuming this is a mistake because the rest of the passage seems to be in the past tense. I didn't catch any others so I just wanted to point it out for continuity. :)

Otherwise, I really want to see where you will take this.

[misled_legend]

Sorry for the belated response. Chapter One is completed and up on LJ as well as Fictionpress. Currently working on chapter two. A little messed up ideas/comment about the story made by yours truly (and written as well) is on my journal.