Lay the Past Down and Let Her Rest

[missflyer]

Brigit's Flame December Week 4, "Walk the past to sleep -- lay her down and let her rest". Poetry, about 265 words, no warnings, again based on true events

Comments

[darlinleo]

I do like the way you flirted with intimacy here in the ordered journey of a short-lived relationship. In my opinion, if you trimmed down a few lines the whirlwind romance would blow our hair back ;)

[missflyer]

Thank you, darlinleo! Hm, I wonder what could be trimmed? Maybe if I could condense the first four stanzas into maybe two, to reflect just how whirlwind they were, and keep the rest more or less the same? Maybe cut out one of the last group of stanzas... Food for thought, thanks!

[aquarius_galuxy]

but hopefully that leads to better options ahead!! :)

[missflyer]

That's what I'm hoping! :)

[cedarwolfsinger]

So sad. Perhaps inevitable. Hopefully, there will be other days and joys ahead.

[missflyer]

From the first day I met him in person, I had a feeling that we wouldn't work out, but I wanted to give it a shot anyways. No regrets, you know? Thanks :)

[jlly_coppercorn]

It really reflects the kind of disconnected way we have to look at relationships until the end stops hurting.
I like the turtle. :D

[missflyer]

Thanks, jlly. I love the turtle. She's right now sleeping on a rock underwater in her habitat, oblivious to her immortalization :)

[jlly_coppercorn]

Well, you wouldn't want it to go to her shell.

[missflyer]

Yeah, her shell is big enough as it is already, haha.