SasuNaru - Pulsation; dreaming with your eyes wide open. - 1/1

[missingairmail]

Title: Pulsation; dreaming with your eyes wide open. 1/1
Author: missingairmail
Pairing: SasuNaru
Rating: R - Implied sexual relations.
Word Count: 255
Warnings: Male/Male relation, strong hints of sexual behaviour. Do not read if this sort of stuff is not your thing.
Comments: Mm, a short little ficlet/drabble thing that hit me. Enjoy and review, as always. *

Comments

[ultrasushi]

Read it, loved it. ♥ Amazing style you have there, me likes. :]

[missingairmail]

Thank you! *smiles gratefully*

[scissorsnstrife]

you really are absolutely excellent at capturing the essence of turbulence of sasuke and naruto's relationship i remember sparring was really good i don't know how you do it really... sasuke and naruto are terrible and wonderful together

[missingairmail]

*laughs* Thank you! I'm really surprised to hear a reference to one of my other fictions; especially since I only have three so far, but nonetheless, I'm incredibly pleased. Sasuke and Naruto really are quite the dynamic, no? *laughs* Thanks again!

[mh_escapee]

Wow, that's great. Your writing style captures their whole 'relationship' quite well.

[missingairmail]

Thank you!

[mija711]

wow, like everyone else said that was pretty damn great, love the dynamics of the two, and you wrote it in a way that it doesnt exactly SAY WHOSE the one in the shower and whose the one who left, really good I loved it, thank you for the excellent read, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)

[missingairmail]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. *smiles*

[transient_words]

Wow, from a stylistic point of view this was brilliant and very evocative, vivid: this is extremely well put together and every word conveys strong emotions. Though you write in a very subtle manner, I caught the feelings of wistfulness, bitterness and unsatisfied yearning quite well. The last sentence is an embodiment of how desperate the narrator truly feels.

I love, love that in spite of the simplicity and shortness of the sentences, this piece is very detailed; your descriptions regarding the clacking of the necklace, the repetition of "breathe in, breathe out" created a very powerful, lively picture. The usage of “one-two” gave this piece a very chant-like and I daresay, rhythmic quality which conveys a hectic, frenzied atmosphere.

Sorry if this review comes across as incoherent, but I am really in love with this piece (and impressed). It was a real pleasure to read and thought-provoking. All in all, an excellent read.

[missingairmail]

It's not incoherent at all! Thank you so much for the comment; I love reading reviews like this. It's people like you that inspire me to write more! *laughs* I had been slightly worried that the emotional subtext would be a little too subliminal to be caught, but I'm glad that it wasn't. I'm always a little nervous about putting up raw pieces like this (As in, those without standard past tense, full sentence format), but you proved me wrong. I look forward to your review when I write something else!

Say, you wouldn't mind if I friended you, would you? I absolutely adore your writing style, and since the feeling's mutual (Am I correct in assuming that?)... *laughs nervously*

[transient_words]

No, I wouldn't mind if you friended me and you aren't wrong in assuming. I also adore your writing style.

[missingairmail]

That's great. *smiles* I can't wait to see more fictions from you!