I like this one. Even as the chaotic structure matches the state of mind behind it, the mirroring of lines is very poetic. I think the "careless shake of hair" is very telling, a good ending.
thanks for all the comments! Just go down the line and comment on everything... :-p Thanks for taking the time, and also for being honest! I've posted a couple new thing-- and how come you haven't posted much lately? Or at least last time I checked, i didn't see anything new... i will look again.
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