wow that was really good. I like the way you dragged in the reader, i wasnt sure if she was the rape victim in the news or what was going on but the end kind of like explains a tiny bit but leaves you with more questions. I also liked the way you described things, you set the characters mood. I was confused with the thoughts the characters had. the quotations made me think they were saying thier thoughts aloud or something. Overall, it was really good. i like your short stories. you should publish these. =]
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I like the way you dragged in the reader, i wasnt sure if she was the rape victim in the news or what was going on but the end kind of like explains a tiny bit but leaves you with more questions.
I also liked the way you described things, you set the characters mood.
I was confused with the thoughts the characters had. the quotations made me think they were saying thier thoughts aloud or something.
Overall, it was really good. i like your short stories. you should publish these. =]
by the way, hows Emerson?!??
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i could definitely feel the downtown boston scene before it was even mentioned
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