Unbeta'd Prologue to the once Untitled Westeros Project, now working title: Cannibal's Hymn

[moa_osen]

Stalactites of candle wax dripped from the small table; brittle white tendrils that had grown thick over time.  He’d managed to keep a constant flame going, altered his schedule so that when one was burning down he could transfer the light to another.  He’d kept the light going for over a year now.  A constant light burning, a constant prayer-the

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[onborrowedwings]

Ooo a very intriguing beginning! I'm hoping that you'll get the next chapter up sometime soon so that we can see what's in store for them. I loved the dark mood, the imagery, his prayers to only the Maiden.

The only concrit I have would be that Sandor would most likely that even had he killed Ser Illyn or Joffrey it would have been futile, he would've been struck down before he could save her.

Loved this line:

He was nearly certain that she was dead. That by his inaction he’d killed her. Either way, he’d live for her and only for her-her life, her chances, her memory-only her. If she ever had need he’d save her--as he should have a thousand times before.

[moa_osen]

Thanks for the concrit. I am trying to communicate that he knows that he would have died, but at least he would have disrupted the chain of power and he might have been able to provide her with something better through his demise. I'm going to roll that around in my brain and re-tool it. Thank you for reviewing-- I am crazy about your writing!

[caroh99]

Awww i liked it a LOT! we can see from the start the reasons for why sandor is going to be so "devoted" and not harsh with sansa even when she is very angry at him. You explained i think all the points and reasons behind his new way of living very well, and i could feel and imagine him regretting in the long nights what he did and didn't do, so yes, this was very good and fantastic and i hope more comes soon :D can't wait for them to encounter each other again :D

[wolfgirl31]

Oh wow, this is a fantastic start :) I'd like to leave you some concrit, but seriously, I can't think of a single thing to change!

This whole project sounds so awesome. Can't wait to read more!

(But I also hope you won't abandon your other fics now that they're back ;))

[annestark]

Oh my...you are well on your way to a true masterpiece.

The mood of this piece is incredible - at turns heartbreaking and frightening. It left me almost afraid for Sandor's state of mind, and what really would happen to him if he found out Sansa was dead.

It is also realistic - I can see book or tv cannon Sandor acting like this; if he devoted himself so thoroughly to the travesty that was the Lannisters, I can only imagine how he will cleave himself to the memory (and near worship) of his Little Bird.

I have no concrit to offer, only a plea for moremoremore!

[westeroswolf]

I hooked already! Great imagery with the candle and knights and maids. It's stands brilliantly as a one shot as an exploration of his obsession with Sansa, but I'm so happy there's going to be more.
The last line where he hates himself for wanting something to save her from is gorgeous.