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[mochaprincess24]

Input please.... grammar, style, everything else.

There are a couple of commas that I'm pretty sure don't belong.

This will be our nice, glossy-printed ad that we'll put up in horsey places to get attention:

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[nyhev]

These look great! On the last two fliers, it's a little confusing looking to see specifics about Kids Day Out and Camps underneath the list of all the services offered at First Love. Maybe put a box around the list of services to set them apart from the rest of the flyer? A mini heading, or something over the section that starts Recommended for ages 8+ would be helpful too, so that it's clear whether you mean for the camps or for all services. The glossy add looks great! As someone who puts up a lot of notices and signs, I recommend printing the mass-produced signs on some kind of colored paper as well. I perhaps even hot-pink? :-) Color makes people pay attention, white makes people's eyes glaze over, and they don't absorb a damned thing.

I sent links to the pics to my mom for copy editing. She's the queen. She'll email you suggestions or fixes to the gmail account on the add.