Mechanical Michelangelo part 28

May 17, 2005 22:19

part 28 )

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forefinger May 17 2005, 21:29:04 UTC
Oh, *that* happend to him... how sad(((( So he remembered how the card was stolen right? Why? And will he tell Bri, when he finds him? Or it's gonna be a mystery?
I really felt for Justin, you wrote wonderful chapter, as usual :) Thnks)
P.S. Sorry for billion questions)

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mohawking May 18 2005, 20:04:43 UTC
Don't be sorry for the questions ::G:: Just don't be mad when I just whistle instead of answering;) All will be revealed as I delve deeper into the story:) thanks for the fb!

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xocydcharisseox May 17 2005, 22:06:42 UTC
ooooooooooh....i get it now........thats how he lost brian's credit card....ahh...i c...

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mohawking May 18 2005, 20:05:02 UTC
yep, you got it!

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princesskirsty May 17 2005, 22:25:16 UTC
this doesn't match the last chapter....is justin having a flashback? and he'll wake up and he'll be back with Brian?! *cries* i didn't like that chapter....can't this story be happy? *cries more*

great chapter though!

hugs

Kirsty
xxx

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mohawking May 18 2005, 20:09:07 UTC
the last word of chap 27 and first word of chap 28 fit together! 'his head'

It's kinda merging them into one, seeing it from justin's pov. what does the victim really go through when he's had such a harsh blow? Do you feel pain or does your mind wonder into a different time or place? (it seemed like a good way to get in some back ground info without info dumping ::g::)

thannk you for the fb!

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ladooshka May 17 2005, 22:33:34 UTC
It was sad to read flash back:-((

Losing the credit card wasn’t about the money, it never was, it was about Brian using the credit card to find him

It's actually broke my heart. Poor boy seventeen year-old on a street with nowhere to go with no friends and lover to find him. It is hell of a life for street boys.

Young, though not as young as him, with the eyes of an eighty year old, jaded and tired

Was it Cam? I just think that may be how they met each other first time.

Thank you for such wonderful heartbreaking chapter!

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mohawking May 18 2005, 20:10:04 UTC
glad you liked this chap! Not saying if it was Cam or not:-)

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mo_52 May 18 2005, 00:04:11 UTC
So good.

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mohawking May 18 2005, 20:10:16 UTC
thank you!

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