World is a bit upside down at the moment (unemployed, fruitless job search, and moving in with friends next month - not a bad thing but not something I want to have to do) but I'm remaining optimistic :) I still do LJ a lot though ;)
There's my girl. I'm so THRILLED to see you here! ♥
He's drunk. Lately, he's always drunk-- there's a nice malaise in that, yes? Add on the sputtering line, and you get this nice, immediate picture of a drooling, dopey moron, the kind that's always leaning on you for support when he's about to fall over and black out.
And he's in this bar, reminiscing... oh, the old times and why he loved this bitch who was gloriously self-indulgent. The memories are always better than the life they lived. Who hasn't been there, huh? Remembering how sweet it all was, when you actually fought and tore each other's eyes out and one of you gained fifty pounds while the other lost all their hair. =P
This is a great snippet, sweetie. I spotted a rogue comma in "She had soft (,) skin and soft hands..."
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He's drunk. Lately, he's always drunk-- there's a nice malaise in that, yes? Add on the sputtering line, and you get this nice, immediate picture of a drooling, dopey moron, the kind that's always leaning on you for support when he's about to fall over and black out.
And he's in this bar, reminiscing... oh, the old times and why he loved this bitch who was gloriously self-indulgent. The memories are always better than the life they lived. Who hasn't been there, huh? Remembering how sweet it all was, when you actually fought and tore each other's eyes out and one of you gained fifty pounds while the other lost all their hair. =P
This is a great snippet, sweetie. I spotted a rogue comma in "She had soft (,) skin and soft hands..."
Again, so happy to see you! ♥
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I love the 3rd paragraph. I would copy/paste but my iPod app isn't letting me.
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