working it out

[mojgani]

edits to a new piece for the new book. not sure yet. i like the stuff in the new version, but i like the simpleness in the original, how spare it is.

new version
Wont you come out tonight

At the top of the hill is a small but very tall house

Comments

[spillogical]

As someone who has been adding new meat to old bones lately, I understand this particular quandry.

I'm not fond of people offering me unsolicited editing advice, so if you'd like any suggestions, hit me back and let me know

for what it's worth

[cynthia_french]

I find the new version to be more simple, and I fell in love with it before reading the older version. I also like the way it breaks on the page.

new>old

[anonymous]

I love both, but prefer the newer one. The added material pays its own way.

[east_midlands]

Really enjoyed reading the new one! Looking forward to your new book...

[youonlylive1nce]

The new version is nothing less than a great improvement. Great material, can't wait for the new book!