*trying to be helpful* Firion's app critchaos_anomalyFebruary 18 2010, 23:04:40 UTC
From Personality: But, Firion is also a bit guillible and easy to be decived by simple things which normal people would acoid. Because of past experiences, like the Lamia Queen trying to seduce him when she was acting being the Princess Hilda or when he hires a pirate ship commaned by Leila who ended betrayed them for a moment) he hates that being used like that. And also ends in being not noticing when he is falling into any tramps either.
That last sentence sounds a bit confusing to me. And... Tramps? Eh?
Weapons/Abilities I think what you can do to extend it is probably describe some (if not all) of his attacks in Dissidia. That's what I did for Squall anyway, but basically emphasize more on him being a weapon master. A description of him using all of his weapons in the same battle (and carries them everywhere) would be nice too.
Third Example It just needs to be a little longer, dear.
Journal ExampleIt's supposed to be words on a journal, so unless it's a "video" post, we shouldn't know what he's doing action-wise besides
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I stress out on Applications for at least a good week and I stress even more once they're submitted. Hell, I know how you feel, really. *hugs*
But yeah, I think once you get around to just explaining his attacks in Dissidia, the weapons section should be fine. Just talk about how each of his moves uses at least two weapons in combination and all that?
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But, Firion is also a bit guillible and easy to be decived by simple things which normal people would acoid. Because of past experiences, like the Lamia Queen trying to seduce him when she was acting being the Princess Hilda or when he hires a pirate ship commaned by Leila who ended betrayed them for a moment) he hates that being used like that. And also ends in being not noticing when he is falling into any tramps either.
That last sentence sounds a bit confusing to me. And... Tramps? Eh?
Weapons/Abilities
I think what you can do to extend it is probably describe some (if not all) of his attacks in Dissidia. That's what I did for Squall anyway, but basically emphasize more on him being a weapon master. A description of him using all of his weapons in the same battle (and carries them everywhere) would be nice too.
Third Example
It just needs to be a little longer, dear.
Journal ExampleIt's supposed to be words on a journal, so unless it's a "video" post, we shouldn't know what he's doing action-wise besides ( ... )
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I need to spell check it too, because there was a typo there.
I still need to explain more about the weapon section. And write more about the samples because I don't like them :|
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But yeah, I think once you get around to just explaining his attacks in Dissidia, the weapons section should be fine. Just talk about how each of his moves uses at least two weapons in combination and all that?
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A-alright! Can you check Dudecia's too?
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