Song Fic Series: In My Own Words - Chapter 1

[mongo_o_o]

Chapter 1: Sexy Love
Author: me (mongo_o_o)
Pairing: Sho/Nino
Rating: R?
Genre: AU, Romance
Disclaimer: I don't own them (unfortunately)

A/N: OMG, finally! I am sooooo sorry this took me so long..and I don't really have any excuses >_< I told everyone I would update really soon, but it took me what? 2 months? And this chapter is really short again...

Comments

[narusaku4vr]

I was wondering when you'll update this but the long wait is okay.
Poor Sho, he's seems to have fallen for Nino... I hope Nino wil feel the same too.

[mongo_o_o]

i'm sorry for not updating such a long time >__>
thank you for reading :)

[mongo_o_o]

and I forgot: Merry Christmas ^__^

[boblemon]

Hmm. I really like the idea of this, but it's so short right here. The first section is perfectly fine, but I feel like you skipped a lot in the middle... How to explain it? Like in drabbles, you'll see this format fairly often, with just jumping from scene to scene, so that part works fine, but I sort of feel like you left out too much. Like for the second part, I wasn't sure if they had left the club or not, if they were having sex or still just dancing, and then the last one, I'm not sure how it fits in with the rest, like is this a thought that Sho had later or is it something he comes to realize over time? I think this is very close to being there, but maybe adding a few more details about timeline or referencing other things that happened in between would make it go more smoothly

[mongo_o_o]

I get what you mean, even while writing it felt like I left out a lot, but I had some troubles thinking of what to write, so I just left it like that^^ I read it over again after reading your comment and yeah, it's hard to understand what's going on in the middle, maybe I will edit it if I have some time..

I don't know when, but I will continue this! I didn't want this last paragraph to sound that way..more like a thought Sho had to express his feelings? I don't really know..
But since I'm a beginner in writing I will keep the chapters short I think..

Thank you so, so, so much! You really helped me with this comment! Makes me happy that someone took some time and thought of so many things to help me ^__^

And Merry Christmas!

[boblemon]

Well, before I write something I usually think about a lot of details, for example, where did they go after? Someone's house? Or a hotel? How did they get there? Why was Sho interested in Nino? Just because he's handsome? Why did Nino say yes? Were they drunk or sober? Although a lot of the time these details won't actually make it into the story, it helps me to form the scene more concretely in my head so I can get out the stuff that's interesting or important. I actually don't know if this will work for anyone else besides me, though...=A= I have a habit of overthinking things...But it's a suggestion anyway. :)

Anyway, Merry Christmas to you too. I don't mind helping a little if you have any more questions.

[mongo_o_o]

maybe i should try that..i usually don't think about things like that, if i did i would have written them down xD
and thanks again ^___^

[all4cyanide]

Okay... I'm straight now (referencing last two comments I made). Short, but sweet I say! I wasn't confused by anything at all and I am still really interested in this fic! So short or not, keep up the good work!

[mongo_o_o]

haha, your comments made me laugh :D
thank you so much for the kind words!
and merry christmas! ^__^
(i love arashicrackaday btw, just wanted to tell you XD)

[mongo_o_o]

thank your for the nice comment!
and OMG that's a fic in my comment section, gonna read it later (going to a party now~) *________*
thank you for the tip! and merry christmas!

[mongo_o_o]

ok, read it now :D i see what you man! thanks :)
and i really like that short drabble, even if it was just an example XD

[chibipinkpetals]

ah this is very interesting, and i want to read more about the whole situation and Nino's thoughts about this whole thing. thnx for this. will be waiting for more. :DDD

[mongo_o_o]

thank you for the nice words! ^_^ and merry christmas!