LJ Idol Week 1 - Saying Goodbye

[monkeysugarmama]

When the phone rang, I was busy. Well, not really busy, I was just reading on the couch, but in my freshly-graduated mind, I was too busy to be disturbed. I’d just started a new job. After a day of straightening shelves and chasing kids around the children’s section of the library, all I wanted to do was relax with my book, drink a glass of cheap

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[sky_designs]

Wow. Beyond the fact that I'm in the line to know how it ends, I just felt the need to tell you that really caught my attention and kept me involved, and is done in a way that keeps it real and able to feel as if we're right there with you.

*hugs*

[monkeysugarmama]

Thank you so much!

I am going to comment further down so everyone who is concerned will know how it ends (and I promise my mother is fine.)

*hugs to you too*

[walkertxkitty]

This just gave me chills reading it. I can't even begin to imagine the absolute terror, guilt, and horror you must have felt.

[monkeysugarmama]

It's such a cliche that we don't realize what we have until it's gone, but all that morning I was so angry with myself for throwing away what might have been my last conversation with my mother.

[johnmill79]

Oh my, that is so scary. That was definitely a horrible day for so many.

[monkeysugarmama]

When my friend called, my first thoughts were so selfish...
'Why is he calling me? I am in Georgia, this doesn't affect ME...'

My mother was just one tiny piece of that awful day. It affected EVERYONE, whether you had to fear for the life of a loved one or not!

[boxsofrain]

I want you to just keep on writing.

[monkeysugarmama]

Thank you. I stopped where I did for several reasons, but I promise to share the end of the story in just a second.

[theafaye]

I wish you had ended this rather than leave it hanging. It's really well written, but leaving it open like this feels a little like soap opera to me - it takes away a bit of the impact when it's such a powerful story with so much meaning to so many.

Still, definitely worthy of a vote - you are going far this season.

[monkeysugarmama]

You're one of those folks who wants a movie to end with some kind of resolution, I guess? (I am teasing you because I am that way too

[theafaye]

I wouldn't say that you trivialised it - it is a very powerful story and absolutely sums up the sorts of emotions that people went through on that day. More that leaving it open ended like that makes the MOST powerful response what happened next???? Rather than, as you so aptly put it, never knowing which goodbye will be your last. It makes the greatest focus on did she survive rather than everything else and I think that's a shame because you have such a hard hitting story. You totally have my vote for it, I just personally feel that it would have been better answering that question so that people could focus on the message rather than the ending - after all, how many people's comment has been 'is she alive

[monkeysugarmama]

Too funny as far as next week's topic, lol!

Well, my plan was to come back to it and finish the story anyway, which I did this morning, so now no one else has to wait!

As for movies, I haven't seen No Country, but I do recall not being as enthralled with Lost in Translation as the rest of the world. I did find the karaoke scene amusing but the rest just kind of left me flat.

When you said No Country For Old Men for a second I thought Brokeback Mountain which I didn't see until this spring. Now *that* movie was one of the best I have seen in forever.