i think this is the best one you've written, and it's very good, however, I think the last paragraph is crap. btw, if you don't want critiques, now would be an excellent time to tell me :)
right, i didn't extrapolate earlier because i wanted to make sure first that you wanted me too. soo, last paragraph: the tone is totally different, and, much as i hate to say it, the refrigerator/humming/yellow light thing is overused. also, the chip-problem metaphor just doesn't quite work, but it was an interesting thought. the last sentence is pretty good though.
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