I absolutely loved the interaction and the conversation they had over Eiri's new book. Readers almost never see an intellectual discussion between Eiri and Shu.
This was definitely refreshing! Thanks for sharing!
I love to write conversations - so much so sometimes I think nothing actually happens in some of my stories...! But I agree about Eiri and Shuichi. Shuichi's personal development was something that really hooked me on Grav, esp. in the anime, and I don't see why he can't have an intelligent conversation. And Eiri, even in the original manga, was not nearly articulate enough for me - for a man who made his living with words, being so monosyllabic seemed a bit odd, even if it was part of his distinct character.
Great work! I really enjoy how you write conversations. Wether the characters are canon or oc's, you give them voice in such a realistic manner. This is more evident in part two of this fanfic, but I'm mentioning now anyway since it's something I like so much about your writing and is always present. ;)
Now, this part caught my attention:
he had often been tempted to read one of his beloved Yuki’s novels in the hope they could have a conversation just like this one. And yet he had never done it. Yuki’s apparently gloomy view of romantic love wasn’t exactly heartening for one who was still, underneath it all, far from sure that his lover loved him back.I Gravi-fan I like very much mentioned that Eiri takes interest in Shuichi's music (watches his tv interviews, helps him to write song lyrics...), yet Shuichi never tries to get involved with Eiri's writing. He doesn't even read his books
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This was definitely refreshing! Thanks for sharing!
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I love to write conversations - so much so sometimes I think nothing actually happens in some of my stories...! But I agree about Eiri and Shuichi. Shuichi's personal development was something that really hooked me on Grav, esp. in the anime, and I don't see why he can't have an intelligent conversation. And Eiri, even in the original manga, was not nearly articulate enough for me - for a man who made his living with words, being so monosyllabic seemed a bit odd, even if it was part of his distinct character.
Hope you like the conclusion!
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Great work! I really enjoy how you write conversations. Wether the characters are canon or oc's, you give them voice in such a realistic manner. This is more evident in part two of this fanfic, but I'm mentioning now anyway since it's something I like so much about your writing and is always present. ;)
Now, this part caught my attention:
he had often been tempted to read one of his beloved Yuki’s novels in the hope they could have a conversation just like this one. And yet he had never done it. Yuki’s apparently gloomy view of romantic love wasn’t exactly heartening for one who was still, underneath it all, far from sure that his lover loved him back.I Gravi-fan I like very much mentioned that Eiri takes interest in Shuichi's music (watches his tv interviews, helps him to write song lyrics...), yet Shuichi never tries to get involved with Eiri's writing. He doesn't even read his books ( ... )
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