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This is War Update =)

Mar 17, 2012 22:36

Name of series: This is war

Chapter two: Doomsday Clock

Rating: PG13

Characters: Prowl and Jazz

Summary: Prowl and Jazz are the best Special Operations team Cybertron has ever seen. Only one problem - they can't stand each other.

Warnings: Unnamed deaths, mild swearing, violence

Inspired by http: / yamiyouka. deviantart. com / art/ Black-and- Whites- ( Read more... )

tranformers g1, prowl, 'verse: this is war, prowl/jazz, oneshot, jazz

Comments 6

gracesolo March 18 2012, 01:00:32 UTC

Oh yeah!! It looks even better posted!! This was a joy to beta and totally pulled me in, yanking my emotions about, in the very best way...can't wait to beta the next chapter! Hugs and Cookies all around!! :-)

pjlover666 March 18 2012, 22:06:25 UTC

You are the best beta ever and your support for this fic is truly appreciated. I'm very happy you like the story. I look forward of working with you! *heart*

bluebirdsoaring March 18 2012, 02:10:00 UTC

WOAH!!! I don't even have words...you are right...this is war, and they had to do what they had to do. And now they find a way to escape the guilt they will suffer. Ironically it is that guilt which proves Prowl wrong - they aren't monsters as long as they feel and know what the had to do was wrong. They still did it...the act was monstrous...but they are the tools...it's the old "the good of the many outnumber the good of the few or the one" riddle. In war everyone is sacrificed for the good of the many, even the children. Even Prowl and Jazz themselves. You capture that tension so well!!!

pjlover666 March 18 2012, 22:05:08 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm so glad you liked the new chapter. Yeah, it's horrible when children suffer during war... This part was actually inspired from a history book I got as gift. It's about World War 2 and there was an article of how young boys (really young, from age 8-12) were sent on the front lines.
Again, thanks for the wonderful feedback. :)

silberstreif March 19 2012, 23:22:07 UTC

Amazing and chilling. Jazz's anger and Prowl's depression are so natural, so dangerously deep... and they know what they did makes them the worst of the worst.

I love it. Especially the last scene. What a depressing thought, that in the deepest sin they find the peace in each other. Together they go down, together they shoulder the burden.

I wonder what in the universe snapped? After I read it again, whith Prowls hint to monsters and dreams - it seems like it was the sanity of the universe. The Autobots were suppposed to be good. They aren't. And the nightmare will not end.

Now why, why are the bunnys swarming me every time I read something from this universe?

pjlover666 March 20 2012, 08:10:12 UTC

Thank you for the thorough review! I let the readers interpret what snapped in the universe. In my head was the thin thread that separates good from bad, right from wrong :)

Thanks again! I'm interested what your bunnnys have in mind :)