Anniversary Challenge - Sparrow

[pjlover666]

mso-ansi-language:EN-US">Prowl knew the next few Earth days would be hard. He was prepared for it and sincerely hoped Jazz was as well.

mso-ansi-language:EN-US">They we returning from the city one evening, the sky dark grey, as rain threatened to fall on them any moment now. They were driving in peaceful silence, if not slightly melancholic due to

Comments

[silberstreif]

*hugs* You did it not only sorta! This is a wonderful fill!
It's beautiful, especially how you describe the autumn. And I love your Ratchet, he's so crumpy and compassionate at the same time! :D
The story is a really sad one... but it's bittersweet as well, because the hatchling is so cute and well, it will not survive... you can feel how Prowl and Jazz love each other despite the hardship and loss.
Great work!!

[pjlover666]

*hugs back* Thank you so much. Thank you! I owe it to you, you're an awesome teacher when it comes to writing detail ;) Again, thanks *hugs again* I think the fact that both are so upset is because the sparrow would die alone, just like their creation, and I think that was the trigger to this...

[silberstreif]

We teach each other. You have a wonderful gift with your dialogues and since we work together mine are flowing much more natural. *nod* The Sparrow is the trigger to finally accept that they're both remembering and not well. And now I have to ask, what exactly happened to their creation?

[fianna9]

So sad, but so wonderful. I felt some serious sympathy for Jazz and Prowl while reading this, and I felt horrible for Sparrow. I can understand why only Ratchet knows, and you did a great job portraying the confusion everyone else feels.

[pjlover666]

Thank you for reading! Yeah, Prowl and Jazz hurt right now, but in the past this brought them closer and made them stronger... but sometimes the pain is just overwhelming :D

[renegadewriter8]

This is so sad! Poor Jazz and Prowl, my heart broke. Sparrow was a heartbreaking touch to the story, made it all the more powerful. Kudos!

[pjlover666]

Thank you so much for reading! I can't wait to read your fill to the challenge :D

[bluebirdsoaring]

Having a family member who lives with such hidden pain, you did an amazing job of capturing how it affects us all...Very powerful story. I think Ratchet handled it as well as he could. What can you do when you really can't fix it for them?

[pjlover666]

Ratchet is one of the few who knows that they even had a creation. And yeah, he really hates it when he can't do more for his patients. Thank you for reading! ^^

[crnkysnapdragon]

:( Poor Jazz and Prowl, so sad that they lost their sparkling. Great job on the story!

[pjlover666]

Yeah, poor bots. Thank you for reading! I'm glad that you liked it! ^^