ok, so we had to write Emily Dickinson-esque poems for english, and I wrote a few, but I have no idea if they're any good. None of them are finished enugh to hand in or anything, but I'd appreciate any criticism and/or suggestions. (ps, if they don't make sense, it's because I didn't feel like I was being esoteric enough, so I made up some things.)
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heres what i did:
Surrounded by dark horizons--
Smothered by indifferent tides.
The light was taken from my shore--
I was left to drift alone.
I thought I was gone forever,
Drowning in undying silence
But your voice…
You called me home.
I was confronted with an angel--
Beauty molded in human form.
Mending my fading spirit--
You brought the light back to my shore.
Soft lipped kisses healed my wounds--
I lost myself inside your eyes.
Fingertips like velvet--
Run along the scars,
Tracing spider webbed paths.
Memorizing flesh--
You are a waking dream.
My angel.
My love--
personally, i like it better with out the dashes and shit. i like to leave my poems without puncuation to let the reader decide what it means to them, but V loved it. hope it gives you ideas
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