[fic] Distractions

[morbid_musings]

Distractions

Rating : T
Summary: Kaoru feel bored, but big brother comes to the rescue.

Disclaimer: Ouran Host Club does not belong to me.
Feedback: All criticism accepted.
Word Count : 2149
Notes: Thanks to

Comments

[moon_lit_night]

I'm not sure why there aren't any comments for this already o_O;;
I really liked it. Sounds like what actually would happen. It being hot was a plus, as well :D
*adds to memories*

[morbid_musings]

Thanks! Am glad that you liked it.

a nice fic, but....

[dyoklako]

it was a nice introspective but the shifting was kinda awkward because we know the first speaker was Kaoru and then suddenly it shifted to Hikaru. i think a break of sorts could have been made to make the transition more effective.

still thank you for sharing what you've written as it is quite hard to write introspective Hikaru/Kaoru fics, make them in character and works.

Re: a nice fic, but....

[dyoklako]

*works. i meant _work_ which relates to the narrative/fic. ^^"

Re: a nice fic, but....

[morbid_musings]

I agree with you Hikaru/Kaoru are hard to write. Anyway, thanks for the concrit--I will take your point into consideration.

Re: a nice fic, but....

[dyoklako]

you're welcome. hope to read more from you. ^_^

=3=

[kofi]

I love it -- but I won't gush too much, as you already know my opinion. <333

In retrospect, I suppose I should have noticed what the above poster said about transition -- but it was smooth to me. I still don't see a problem with it, but transition is one of my own problems. I'm so sorry. ;3; If you ever want me to Beta for you again, I'll definitely work harder!

Again -- it's a gorgeous story. The introspect is wonderful, the actions are perfect, and everything works well together. I'm also stunned that there aren't more comments.

Re: =3=

[morbid_musings]

Don't feel sorry; I should have noticed the transition myself. Yet sometimes writers can be blind when it comes to mistakes. I'm definitely willing to let you beta again; however, I have no idea what other fandoms you're familiar with.

I don't really care about the quantity of comments-it's the quality of feedback that counts. Besides, I don't advertise much. So, it is my own fault, really.

Wonderful <3!

[ceressakuya]

o.o! Good fanfic! Probably one of the best i've read. All the others were too angsty. This one's cute and just right <3!

Thanks!~

Re: Wonderful <3!

[morbid_musings]

I'm really lame for replying like a year later, but thanks. I'm glad you liked.

[ina_noranaya]

I enjoyed this, but I'd also like to voice a bit of (along the way, this became a lie) concrit. I will say that I didn't notice a problem with the flow of the transition the first (but that wouldn't stop it not making sense to other people, my perceptions can be weird

[morbid_musings]

Wow, I honestly don't know what to say. I'm not offended by the critique at all, but love you for pointing all these things out. You didn't torment me at all. I really appreciate your thoughtful and very well-written feedback

[ina_noranaya]

The "genuinely curious" bit was actually a commentary on my own slithers-question; I realized midway through it could be interpreted offensively. And snails!

I'm floored, because I don't think I've ever been called awesome before. *blushes* (What makes this even more flattering is that that's just how I've felt about most of the people I've friended. I am simply not worthy.) But you're welcome to friend me. I'll be sure to nose around your journal too, and then hopefully friend you back. ^_^

I'm actually afraid to take on fandom. XD But, if you're suicidal or a glutton for punishment or something (okay, the writing's not that bad, but I wouldn't call it good either), I have put up maybe 4 pieces of short original fiction on my lj. So, if you were morbidly curious about my writing style, anyway, you could get a sense for how bad it is.