Last Chance Idol: In the Garden

[morettaallstar]

Charlie heaves himself down onto what's left of the porch, a hand pressing against the stitches in his side, and thinks to himself that this used to be such a quiet neighbourhood

Comments

[swirlsofblue]

Oh, this is awesome, love it! There's a wonderful interplay between light and darkness. I love how it seems really happy and sweet, but the undercurrent of ominous darkness is threaded through even then by the use of names. I love the characterisations, Keira has such a strong impact, especially with that last line.

[morettaallstar]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked Keira, she's new but will probably be making more than one appearance in the Idol (provided I get through, of course).

There's a lot more darkness to this world than I had originally budgeted for, but hey. Let's roll with it.

[medleymisty]

Interesting dystopia. Also Sims mention! :)

Particularly interesting to me was that you have all these people with special powers but no internet, or antiseptic? Makes me very curious about how the world works.

[morettaallstar]

Thank you! This world is a bit odd, but I'm enjoying building it.
I never said they don't have antiseptic or Internet - they just have no unsupervised/unauthorised use of it. ;)

[n3m3sis43]

Interesting... now I am definitely curious.

[crisp_sobriety]

I like the way you use Keira's power to show the mental states of the other characters. Very creative!

This is quite an interesting world you've made here.

[morettaallstar]

Thank you! Considering the world was improvised, I am having a lot of fun with it now the that I can't change the story... Typical.

[kickthehobbit]

I really love the world-building in this-it's subtle and well-handled. :)

[morettaallstar]

Ah, thank you! :D

[itsjustc]

I enjoyed reading this. I like the way we see how other are feeling through Keira.