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Oceanic Descent - Chapter Nineteen

Jul 10, 2009 00:30

Title: Oceanic Descent -- Chapter Nineteen
Author: motherendurance
Beta: jehane18
Fandom: American Idol RPS
Pairing: Cook/Archuleta
Rating: G to NC-17. This part is R/NC-17
Word count: 2740 words this chapter (44,430 words cumulative)
Disclaimer: Not for profit work of fiction. Fair use of copyright material. No intended imputation regarding the character or inclination ( Read more... )

fic: motherendurance, fic, oceanic descent, cook/archuleta

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penrith1 July 10 2009, 09:54:20 UTC

Speechless, speechless. What to say? In a high squeeky voice and a lot of clearing of throat - ummmm Ren THAT WAS THE BEST SEX I NEVER HAD EVER. THAT THEY COULD READ EACH OTHERS INTIMATE THOUGHTS ADDED A WHOLE NEW DIMENSION TO THEIR LOVE MAKING. And the SNACK. BETTER THAN SWALLOWING. I think I better go lie down in a darkened room for a little.
Oh and for the record beautifully written and paced and described.

jehane_writes July 10 2009, 15:33:32 UTC

Wasn't it amaaaaaazing?!? HOLY TELEPATHIC SEXING BATMAN!!!! I swear, I was having trouble betaing this, because of the difficulty in breathing! (I think I actually made an amendment that said, "Typo (gosh, kind of difficult to concentrate)"!!)

I LOVED THIS SOOOO MUCH TOO.

(And the snack? How cute is that!!!)

motherendurance July 10 2009, 20:37:12 UTC

Jay darling ( ... )

jehane_writes July 11 2009, 02:05:47 UTC

Heh. I loved your slow build on the telepathic bond - from the box fortress, to the one night where Cook promises the Goddess to take care of David (and the first supersonic sexing occurs!), to Cook being unable to function when David was deep-diving, to the full-on telepathic sexing of NOW.

So, your bond is definitely well placed, and not some deux-ex-machina or device that comes outta nowhere ;)

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soco63 July 10 2009, 12:35:39 UTC

Oh DEAR LORD, what have you done Renata??!! Why am I stupid enough to read this at 8 in the morning? I couldn't help myself! I have a lot to do and really didn't need to be horny all day today.. lol
Besides the hotness, this was beautiful. I love how you so effortlessly combine the two. I agree with Penrith that the combination of the spoken words along with the shared thoughts was absolutely lethal. Wow, just wow.

jehane_writes July 10 2009, 15:37:45 UTC

(I am gonna butt in on all R's comments and respond to them, heeee!)

Yeah, I was kinda stupid enough to offer to BETA this at 12 pm in the afternoon, when I was supposed to be on a conference call.

(Okay, I totally begged her to let me beta, LOL.)

And sat through my entire business day horny as hell. The telepathic thoughts, right? The {I’ll die if you don’t, your hands, your mouth, oh, your mouth…}? I WAS RENDERED STUPID WITH LUST, yo.

motherendurance July 10 2009, 20:45:39 UTC

Jay,

You betaed it during lunch?
Thank you so so much!

Um, no begging needed bb. I would have asked earlier, but you being such a busy IWoM, I didn't want to take up more of your valuable (and billable!) time.

But when you offered, well, that was simply too much temptation to resist.

(((((((((Jay))))))))

Love,
Renata

jehane_writes July 11 2009, 02:01:59 UTC

no, I actually betaed *before* lunch. Then skipped lunch to attend horrid lunch meeting, at which there was no lunch. Finally headed out to eat at 330 pm, by which time there was alcohol involved, heeeeeee.

I beta FAST, see, like the way I review dox. Except my usual dox are way less enhottening ;)

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gypsy_ophelia July 10 2009, 18:01:27 UTC

I agree... LOVED the telepathic elements, and always your scenes have such passionate intensity! Lovely!

motherendurance July 10 2009, 20:49:10 UTC

Hello Night!

Thank you bb, both for reading along and for leaving your kind words!

I am so glad you are enjoying this.

*Mwah!*

Love,
Renata

PS. Perfect icon!
'A Cowgirl And Her Butterflies'
I love it, and it suits you.

clionona July 12 2009, 03:05:38 UTC

OH MY GAWD!!!
*swoons melts dies*
That was incredible, Renata!!!

I mean... GUH!

The telepathic element is sooooooooo good! It adds an entirely new and amazing aspect to the physical part of their relationship.

Loved, loved, loved!!!

What a wonderful thing to read right when I was feeling a wee bit lonely.

♥!

motherendurance July 12 2009, 03:53:15 UTC

Awww,

And it's wonderful to get such a lovely comment from you when I'm feeling a bit ill and wiped. You are a better pick me up then good coffee! (That is my ultimate praise, just sayin'.)

I am sending you all my love,frienship, and good energy straight south-east to you!

((((((Clio)))))

amccoy1972 July 13 2009, 00:14:24 UTC

If there's anything better than hot Cookleta it's hot telepathic!Cookleta. WOW. That was seriously sexy and I'm hoping that you have like, 150 more chapters of this sucker planned out because I don't want it to end anytime soon.

I love where they get into bed and just CANNOT keep from screwing around. GREAT writing -- I can practically feel the softness of Archie's sweatpants.

The part where Archie gives Cook a handjob was so hot it just shorted my brain out. "Not hurting..." OOOOMPH! My girlie bits are just DYING here.

And the part with the SNACK! Aaaaaaaagh! I literally slapped my leg and snorted out loud when I read that. So awesome and so very Archie.

Lastly -- an article from today's NY Times magazine that I thought you might enjoy, "Watching Whales Watching Us":

http://www.nytimes.com/2009/07/12/magazine/12whales-t.html?_r=1&ref=magazine

motherendurance July 13 2009, 01:06:33 UTC

Well my dear Amy, it does seem to be likely to go on a fair bit longer. I am almost sure it'll top out at or over 100k, so I'm glad your sticking along for the ride!

Also, thank you so much for your kind words *blush*... you make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside;)

Well, the snacking urge has a serious reason behind it, but I have to admit I loled when Archie trotted out his best manners. He's so sweet!

That is an absolutely fabulous article. It totally pisses me off that ANYONE is disingenuously pretending to see the link between ferociously loud sonar use and whale injuries and deaths. I mean *bleeding ears and brain lesions*?

Sanctus Ama! That makes me so, so angry. Grrrr.

I am always so happy to see your name pop up in my email darling!

<3<3<3
~Renata

amccoy1972 July 13 2009, 01:20:34 UTC

Hmmm, wonder what motivation is driving the snacking??... boy oh boy am I intrigued! Seriously, this is turning out to be one of my all time fave Cookleta fics. MORE, WOMAN, GIVE ME MORE!

I know, that whale article killed me. There was a part in there about these divers that saved a humpback from fishing nets, and that maybe made up for it a bit. But between that article and the Cheney shit going on, it's hard to be optimistic about the human race.

Wait a minute... things aren't so bad... there's this fucking fabulous woman in Winnipeg writing amazing telepathic! Cookleta fic! All IS right with the world and I feel like there IS a place for me here. ;)

Hugs,
Amy

motherendurance July 13 2009, 01:34:03 UTC

Hmmm... a small hint. Atypical STD.

That's all I'm sayin' baby, but feel free to speculate!

Love ya,
Renata

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