As the bell rung, Veronica had just tossed her items into her messenger bag and walked out the door when suddenly a pair of lips was on her and she was being furiously kissed. By Logan Echolls. Again.
With his tongue in her mouth and hands in her hair and her bag slightly digging into her back, Veronica hit her head on the trophy case and gasped for needed air.
“What. The. Hell.”
Loved this because it is as it should be. :D
And also loved the description of his car in the beginning. Excellently done.
Instead, she sarcastically greeted, “Well, well, Logan certainly has grown up,” then, with more perk than a cheerleader on sugar-free Red Bull, “hi Veronica. It’s so good to see you. You dirty little kids. Sex takes place in the bedroom.”Trina! I'm glad you included her, since she's not mentioned often. I love her character.
Nicely written. Heh, and I could totally imagine Logan twiddling his thumbs after kissing her.
Just a bit of constructive criticism. These lines.. To which Veronica retorted, “Sure. You probably knew she’d be here. I never wanted to screw Duncan over. Actually, I have a boyfriend. Oh, God. Leo.”
As she too ran off, Logan glanced down at his hard-on. ..seemed a bit rushed. They were making out one second, and even the mention of Duncan doesn't scare her off, but then she suddenly thinks of Leo and flees? I think a slower transition would make that part perfect.
Again, really well-written. Another bit of LoVeliness to add to my day =).
I love Alyson Hannigan more than a fat kid loves cake. (I stole this appropriately from a VM fic I read yesterday. Hee.)
Thank you for the constructive criticism; I'll definitely keep it in mind. I think I was more on the thought that Veronica would be scared of cheating. Ah thank you again though.
"Logan smirked, feeling more and more like one Lex Luthor ever so instantly. Keith Mars was going to enjoy this one. And then his daughter was going to murder him. Logan couldn’t wait."
Wait..I'm comfused. What was that about? What's Keith gonna enjoy? Tel me! *whines*
*Sighs* I guess I can wait till the next chapter. (Lol.)
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With his tongue in her mouth and hands in her hair and her bag slightly digging into her back, Veronica hit her head on the trophy case and gasped for needed air.
“What. The. Hell.”
Loved this because it is as it should be. :D
And also loved the description of his car in the beginning. Excellently done.
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Nicely written. Heh, and I could totally imagine Logan twiddling his thumbs after kissing her.
Just a bit of constructive criticism. These lines..
To which Veronica retorted, “Sure. You probably knew she’d be here. I never wanted to screw Duncan over. Actually, I have a boyfriend. Oh, God. Leo.”
As she too ran off, Logan glanced down at his hard-on.
..seemed a bit rushed. They were making out one second, and even the mention of Duncan doesn't scare her off, but then she suddenly thinks of Leo and flees? I think a slower transition would make that part perfect.
Again, really well-written. Another bit of LoVeliness to add to my day =).
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Thank you for the constructive criticism; I'll definitely keep it in mind. I think I was more on the thought that Veronica would be scared of cheating. Ah thank you again though.
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Yeah, Veronica couldn't cheat with a clean conscience. But I'm assuming Leo will be out of the picture soon ;).
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Wait..I'm comfused. What was that about? What's Keith gonna enjoy? Tel me! *whines*
*Sighs* I guess I can wait till the next chapter. (Lol.)
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Aw thank you.
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