I like the extended metaphor--there's a lot to this small poem, in the style of Kooser. I especially like the screamed suggestions, particularly the ice cream suggestion. I think I have the same birds in my head at times. The coat rack is both surprising and ridiculous. So I like it. I think you can get a tidge more mileage out of picking the bird apart with friends. Could that part of the metaphor expand into more concrete detail? +10
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