....Um. Wow. Your stuff always make me feel that anything I will ever do is clumsy and overworked in comparison - just the way you handle this, the flow of it, is wonderful.
And the 'Who knows' has a lovely double-meaning, to my eye. :)
I truly sense your connectedness and engagement with both the artist and the work of the artist.
With the first run, I was a little confused about the ambiguity of your sense of self within the poem. However, when I read it a second time it was like dawning of "oh!" I think I'd argue that this can be positive and/or negative. The ambiguity allows for one to sort of insert themselves within the conversation in the model of "you and artist." I guess meaning it makes the poem more relatable. Of course then when I did realize that there was a bit of self-insertion (which isnt to say bad) I felt a little more isolated. That is to say you and him having this conversation and I being denied participation.
Am I making sense? XD I don't write poetry so Im not exactly sure what a poem's goal is. Is it more self revealing or is it more audience conscious? Either way I enjoyed your poem and you still have a way with words and structure that I can never think to create.
I have the same issue when it comes to this class: vague or clear? Ambiguity bad or good? I can't decide if it's an entirely personal exercise, or something meant to be inclusive. You hit the nail on the head: the reader either feels invited in or held at arm's length. It's a tough line to walk!
I've never done anything like this before, so it feels totally alien to me. I put a lot of myself into my fiction (which, you know XD) but that's mostly feelings or world views. Is this cool with poetry? I mean, I'm a sonnet girl. And those are highly intellectual but also highly personal exercises. But modern poetry?
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And the 'Who knows' has a lovely double-meaning, to my eye. :)
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My thoughts exactly about the "Who!" ;)I'm kind of hoping that someone in the class gets it, and we can digress, and talk about bowties and fezzes.
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With the first run, I was a little confused about the ambiguity of your sense of self within the poem. However, when I read it a second time it was like dawning of "oh!"
I think I'd argue that this can be positive and/or negative. The ambiguity allows for one to sort of insert themselves within the conversation in the model of "you and artist." I guess meaning it makes the poem more relatable. Of course then when I did realize that there was a bit of self-insertion (which isnt to say bad) I felt a little more isolated. That is to say you and him having this conversation and I being denied participation.
Am I making sense? XD I don't write poetry so Im not exactly sure what a poem's goal is. Is it more self revealing or is it more audience conscious? Either way I enjoyed your poem and you still have a way with words and structure that I can never think to create.
Good job! :D
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I have the same issue when it comes to this class: vague or clear? Ambiguity bad or good? I can't decide if it's an entirely personal exercise, or something meant to be inclusive. You hit the nail on the head: the reader either feels invited in or held at arm's length. It's a tough line to walk!
I've never done anything like this before, so it feels totally alien to me. I put a lot of myself into my fiction (which, you know XD) but that's mostly feelings or world views. Is this cool with poetry? I mean, I'm a sonnet girl. And those are highly intellectual but also highly personal exercises. But modern poetry?
Yeah, I've got no idea! :)
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