There should be more Jim/Tony. Even though I think Jim and Steve make an excellent couple, there have been a couple of moments where Tony gets the edge.
And thank you, I'm glad it worked :) It's been a long time since I wrote anything NC-17, so I'm glad it didn't completely fail. *phew*
I think the whole notion of Jim being dominant stemmed from a subversion of the norm, as the whole situation was (both playing the roles that they don't normally, or aren't allowed to).
I wonder why Tony thought that Jim wouldn't clean up by licking?
There are possible reasons (Paul's passive dominance springs to mind), but with a one-shot like this, the 'awe' can be defined in whichever way the reader sees fit.
Thank god you avoided the word 'cock'. It's one of my pet hates in slash fiction. Like, get a bloody thesaurus, dude.
He wasn't used to being the one to submit, and he had certainly never pictured Jim as the aggressor, but lord did he want more. & Jim gave Tony a predatory grin I like your choice of roles, and the way you've written Jim. Very nice.
Yes, indeed. 'Cock' seems to be the only word a lot of people know (though to be fair, I mostly avoided it because I only made one direct reference to the penis).
And yay, glad I wrote Jim okay. I like playing with pairings and roles that aren't so obvious :D
Your icon is <3 - I've just looked up the Marquis de Sade clip on YT and boy does he work it well. Good job I discovered last night that it's possible to screencap directly from YT (in embedded mode, at least)
Well, yes, that too. But that also deserves praise. Many more than that and it's over doing it.
I download the episode that it's from from WTATA, but it's not really worth it, it's not a very good episode to be honest. But Tony in it, oh man. His face: he loves it!
I haven't gotten as far as torrenting yet, hence YT research.
And yes, I agree too many 'technical terms' and too much detail can spill into overkill. It's been a long time since I've written full-on smut, so I didn't want to try too much ;)
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And thank you, I'm glad it worked :) It's been a long time since I wrote anything NC-17, so I'm glad it didn't completely fail. *phew*
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Never thought of Jim/Tony, before. And I agree, there should be more!:D
Like all your fic, I love it!
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I think the whole notion of Jim being dominant stemmed from a subversion of the norm, as the whole situation was (both playing the roles that they don't normally, or aren't allowed to).
I wonder why Tony thought that Jim wouldn't clean up by licking?
There are possible reasons (Paul's passive dominance springs to mind), but with a one-shot like this, the 'awe' can be defined in whichever way the reader sees fit.
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He wasn't used to being the one to submit, and he had certainly never pictured Jim as the aggressor, but lord did he want more. & Jim gave Tony a predatory grin
I like your choice of roles, and the way you've written Jim. Very nice.
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And yay, glad I wrote Jim okay. I like playing with pairings and roles that aren't so obvious :D
Your icon is <3 - I've just looked up the Marquis de Sade clip on YT and boy does he work it well. Good job I discovered last night that it's possible to screencap directly from YT (in embedded mode, at least)
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I download the episode that it's from from WTATA, but it's not really worth it, it's not a very good episode to be honest. But Tony in it, oh man. His face: he loves it!
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And yes, I agree too many 'technical terms' and too much detail can spill into overkill. It's been a long time since I've written full-on smut, so I didn't want to try too much ;)
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