LJ Idol: Once a King

[mscc6422]

Once, I was the king in my pact,
The one who rule it out,
The one who lead in all the fights,
I was the protector,
I was the general,
I was the alpha male all the chick adore,
I was the alpha male that kick my enemies away,
I walked around with pride,
With head up high,
And the strong footprint under my feet
I was known among our kind,
Feared by the weak,
As

Comments

[baxaphobia]

This is really quite creative. Nicely done.

[noodledays]

pretty much took the words from my fingertips. ;)

[mscc6422]

Thank you for both of you... , I'm glad you like it... I'm just trying out something that I can bear, cause honestly just thinking about coprolite just disgust me, lol

[mscc6422]

Thank you... :)

[standgale]

wow, that's really cool. nice rhythm, and a creative take on the theme.

[mscc6422]

Thank you... I'm glad you like it..

[myrna_bird]

Oh poor king, just another mouthful in the food chain.
I liked this.

[mscc6422]

Thank you... :)

[whipchick]

Nice voice - the left-out articles and slightly "off" grammar made it feel very primitive and animalistic.

[whirlgig]

This, exactly. (So I don't have to be articulate)

[mscc6422]

lmao.. sorry, I am still learning English (and apparently I keep failing, lol) through writing, so I tend to mess with everything. I'm glad if this actually add something to the poem... :P