Discovering Chapter Fourteen: Part One of Two

[muchtvsocfic]

I also posted Chapter Thirteen (Parts One and Two) today : http://muchtvsocfic.livejournal.com/tag/discovering+chapter+thirteen

Title: Discovering
Chapter: Fourteen: Part One of Two
Season: Mid-Season Three
Beta: the marvelous beachtree (see previous chapter for gushing)
Constant Warning: There be shameful hurt/comfort in these waters.

Comments

[fredsmith518]

I miss her so much. It hurts a little more each time we talk.

Even in the bad times, we’re a team, Kirsten and me.

love that

very much liked the conversation with the nana, especially,
Don’t do it next time. There. It’s that simple. Now stop feeling sorry for yourself and move on.

[muchtvsocfic]

again...beachtree helped me think of this.

nana too...lol. it seems most of the parts that people like are things that beach pointed out i need to add to make the enitre chapter feel more complete.

[fredsmith518]

heh! I hope she reads this!

seriously, she does give a lot when beta'ing, no question

[anonymous]

Love all the little things. They fill in the big picture.

The call to the Nana is a great way to show Sandy's real feelings and to show that relationship in a new way. Even though she tells him what she should, there's a sense that Sandy's guilty about more than just the building when he confesses. I wonder if she has any idea since she's so removed.

[muchtvsocfic]

In my mind, the Nana and Sandy talk more than they do in the show, lol.

Anyway, I appreciate you taking the time to leave comments. I know many people cruise through and I love that I have readers, but feedback is nice too.

:o)

[anne35]

I love my ma so much.

I'm lovin' the Nana, too.

[chaseii]

I am doomed to hell. Each phone conversation with her is another coal on the lying, liar fire I’m burning.

I can imagine Sandy thinking just this way. Your language here is exactly in character, the words chosen and their arrangement perfect.

It’s a sad day when you’re happy that your kid’s pallor is the same as a ghost’s. This says so much about what Sandy's been through...

Great conversation between Sandy and The Nana. What an inspired use of The Nana in this story, since Sandy so desparately needed someone to confide in who was strong enough to hear the truth, and wise enough to offer both perspective and comfort.

That The Nana beat Sandy to the punch to say 'I love you'? Priceless.