Comments | mujakinotsubasa: [fanfic] White Ash

mujakinotsubasa

[fanfic] White Ash

Jul 03, 2008 15:04

The cell was white; whiter than any sort of snow, whiter than fresh bandages on his body, whiter than the fabric of Shouichi’s uniform.

Door slammed behind his back and Spanner stared at the blinding wall, eyes unconsciously blinking, adjusting to the light. Cold. Quiet. A room just for him. Somehow he felt this was not supposed to be, but it ( Read more... )

angst, fanfic, 4851

Comments 9

questofdreams July 3 2008, 21:38:58 UTC

You done gone and broked my heart!!! (or at least... the part that cares about SpannerShou, which only seems to be there when YOU'RE involved XD b/c only you can make me care about them!!) IS IT ALSO THE CUTE KISSING PICTURES STARING BACK AT ME FROM YOUR LJ BACKGROUND?! XDD

Oh Shouichi <3333 That poor guy D: WHAT IS HE DOING WORKING FOR BYAKURAN ANYWAY?! *wants to knoooow*

You did a beautiful job getting the emotions across and I love how accepting Spanner was of his fate, even if it buuuurns ;___; I honestly believe Shou-chan WOULD let Spanner go <3333 *shakes fist at Byakuran*

AND OMG THAT ENDING KILLS ME. ;___; I want happy fic now... =(

mujakinotsubasa July 3 2008, 23:11:06 UTC

You need to care more about SpannerShou! Because I said so! It's adorable and angsty and cute :< AND YES. THE PICTURES COMPEL YOU. COME TO THE DARK SIIIIIDE~~~~~

I wanna know too :< I also want to know how Spanner ended up in the Millefiore. His past, and EVERYTHING ABOUT HIM. I'm not obsessed, nope.

Thank you ♥ I dunno if I was doing characterization right, and there is a distinct lack of geekiness in this fic, but I was too caught up in writing about their emotions to notice XD; Ah well. *shakes fist at Byakuran with you* ;A;

D8 Sadly I don't have any happy fic planned XD; The next one will also be angsty, only a bit less. No death XD

glasssubway July 3 2008, 23:29:55 UTC

So I signed out, just for you, b/c Ulquiorra has no expression

AHHHHHH DO YOU HEAR THAT SOUND? IT WAS MY HEART, BREAKING! Shouichi is a mess, why is your Shouichi so desperate and ugly in all his conflict and yet, absolutely beautiful? And Spanner is perfect and their relationship is like tearing out your heart and throwing it beating to the ground. I AM NOT WORTHY! *worships*

I will go cry now...

izelmecatl July 4 2008, 02:19:15 UTC

Oh Gosh! That was incredible--it had me tearing up, and the ending too! Amazing characterization as well.

I think it went very well considering the latest chapter’s development, Shouichi looked like he really didn’t wan to give that order…..I hope to see more from your incredible writing.

dame_batsie July 4 2008, 06:28:02 UTC

It's angsty and tragic. And I'm buying it! I thought the characterization was great. I'm a firm believer that people have soft spots for old friends. Yep. ^__^

jaderlife July 4 2008, 15:27:21 UTC

You've probably heard this all a million times, BUT.

I honestly did not expect that twist of events, that Byakuran would so suddenly pop up with the gun. Again, I reiterate that he is a Shouichi stalker. >.>
They are so remarkably IC! I could just look at the manga and slot them in so perfectly into this fic. Although I'm wary of Shouichi's true personality, but a harassed and troubled schoolboy he might be on one side of the coin, a ruthless, manipulative commander he might be on the other. How whipped is he? I actually doubt he is that whipped. =w=

Guh, I've begun to rant, but, SPANNER! ;w;